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請根據(jù)提示對手機的優(yōu)缺點進(jìn)行分析并發(fā)表至少兩條自己的觀點和建議，全文150字左右。開頭已給出，不計入總字?jǐn)?shù)。
優(yōu)點：
1、手機使人們的生活更方便，因為人們可以隨時隨地聯(lián)系他人，尤其是有重要的事情的時候。
2、手機降低人們的花費，因為人們不必走遠(yuǎn)路親自了解事情，而以較低的花費發(fā)短消息。
3、人們會用手機玩游戲、拍照或在手機上聽音樂，讓人們充分利用科技的發(fā)展而不必攜帶很多機器。
缺點：
1、人們有時不得不接聽錯誤電話。
2、手機的輻射（radioactivity）會損害人類健康。
3、有時手機鈴聲干擾人們的私人生活和公共事務(wù)。
Advantages and Disadvantages of Mobile phones
As every body knows, mobiles are playing an important part in our daily life nowadays. But they have both advantages and disadvantages in my opinion.
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Answer 1

Advantages and Disadvantages of Mobile phones
As every body knows, mobiles are playing an important part in our daily life nowadays. But they have both advantages and disadvantages in my opinion.
　　First, mobiles make it convenient for people to keep in touch with each other wherever they are, especially when they have something important. Second, it reduces the cost as people don’t have to travel a long way to get to know the things in person. We can send messages by mobiles with little money, just 0.1 Yuan for each short text message. Third, we can also play games or take photos or listen to music on the mobiles, let we do many things on them with the development of technology.
But they also have many disadvantages. We have to answer the wrong numbers which are not for us. The radioactivity may do harm to our health. Sometimes the rings may affect others in public or at meetings
Therefore，as far as I am concerned, since cell phone’s use has greatly changed people’s life, it is now necessary that people keep their life going on with mobiles. People’s doubts and questions should lie in not whether to use but how to use it, which depends on each individual’s knowledge and behavior. My suggestion is that on the one hand, technology of mobiles must be improved to minimize its harm to human. On the other hand, apps and network services must be selected carefully to avoid potential distraction to people’s life. Last but not least, education on how to use mobiles correctly should be launched in all possible forms at all time.

試題分析：考查正反觀點議論文。討論的話題是“手機的優(yōu)缺點”，有正反兩方面的觀點。要點都給了出來。本文題型是考生非常熟悉的正反觀點類的議論文，在平時的練習(xí)中也有相應(yīng)的模板。審題時注意本文使用一般現(xiàn)在時，人稱以第三人稱為主，發(fā)表個人意見時使用第一人稱。本文的要點均已給出，考生需要使用合適的連接詞把孤立的要點聯(lián)系成文。如for one thing, for another; besides, firstly, secondly, last but not least等。也要使用一些高級的詞匯詞組以提升文章的檔次分。在文章中可以適當(dāng)使用一至兩句諺語如：Every coin has two sides等可以大大提高文章的文采，提高獲得高分的可能性。
【亮點說明】本文中的詞組和高級句型還是較多的，in person 親自，do harm to對…有害， mobiles make it convenient for people to keep in touch with each other wherever they are, especially when they have something important. 這句話用了it做形式賓語和讓步狀語從句，.We have to answer the wrong numbers which are not for us.這句話用了定語從句， it is now necessary that people keep their life going on with mobiles. 這句話用了it做形式主語，People’s doubts and questions should lie in not whether to use but how to use it, which depends on each individual’s knowledge and behavior. 這句話用了賓語從句和定語從句，My suggestion is that on the one hand, technology of mobiles must be improved to minimize its harm to human. 這句話用了表語從句，范文讀起來很連貫，因為用了很多的關(guān)聯(lián)詞： First, Second, Third, as far as I am concerned, on the one hand, On the other hand, Last but not least,