Question

大氣污染已嚴(yán)重影響到我們的日常生活。就霧霾天氣的防護(hù)措施以及如何治理大氣污染等大家關(guān)心的問(wèn)題，相關(guān)專家提出了一些建議。請(qǐng)根據(jù)專家的建議寫一篇英語(yǔ)短文，用于你校的英語(yǔ)校報(bào)。
【寫作內(nèi)容】
保護(hù)措施：學(xué)校暫停體育課，平時(shí)盡量少開(kāi)門窗，多喝水，多吃水果
治理措施：
個(gè)人方面：少開(kāi)空調(diào)，多乘公共交通工具
政府方面：立法嚴(yán)懲污染企業(yè)，提高公民環(huán)保意識(shí)。
【詞匯】企業(yè)：enterprise  空調(diào)： air conditioner     意識(shí)：awareness
【寫作要求】
1、只能使用5個(gè)句子表達(dá)全部?jī)?nèi)容；
2、作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱；
3、短文的第一句已經(jīng)給出，不計(jì)算在5個(gè)句子中。
【評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)】
句子結(jié)構(gòu)準(zhǔn)確，信息內(nèi)容完整，篇章結(jié)構(gòu)連貫。
Given that smog from air pollution has seriously affected our daily life, an expert on health and environmental protection gives some advice.

Answer 1

Given that smog from air pollution has seriously affected our daily life, an expert on health and environmental protection gives some advice.
We are advised to stop outdoor activities like PE lessons at schools and try to let the doors and windows remain shut most of the time to keep smog out. Meanwhile, we should drink more water and eat more fruits, which are considered to be helpful in such a situation. To deal with air pollution, we individuals have apart to play, such as using air conditioners less and taking pubic transports more often.
Of course, the government should make/ set up laws to punish those enterprises which cause serious pollution. Last but not least, it is of great necessity to improve the public awareness of environmental protection, which will benefit us in the long run.

試題分析：考查提綱作文，考生首先要仔細(xì)審題，話題是霧霾天氣的防護(hù)措施以及如何治理大氣污染，要點(diǎn)是已經(jīng)給出；要考慮以下幾個(gè)方面：（1）層次結(jié)構(gòu)，（2）句子的時(shí)態(tài)（3）內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)。尤其是內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)要把握準(zhǔn)確到位，要點(diǎn)需要考生拿捏準(zhǔn)確以及正確，因?yàn)橹荒苁褂?個(gè)句子表達(dá)全部的內(nèi)容。又要包括所有的要點(diǎn)，考生要注意盡可能使句子的表達(dá)形式多樣化，適當(dāng)?shù)氖褂靡恍└呒?jí)句式和高級(jí)詞匯，以提高書(shū)面表達(dá)的檔次和可讀性。考生要多使用復(fù)雜句，一句話中多包含些信息。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】文中使用了非常好的短語(yǔ)和句子為文章增色不少，比如：keep sth out 不讓…進(jìn)來(lái)，deal with 處理，Last but not least最后但同樣重要的是, in the long run.從長(zhǎng)遠(yuǎn)角度看，We are advised to stop outdoor activities like PE lessons at schools and try to let the doors and windows remain shut most of the time to keep smog out. Meanwhile, we should drink more water and eat more fruits, which are considered to be helpful in such a situation. 這句話用了非限制性定語(yǔ)從句，To deal with air pollution, we individuals have a part to play, such as using air conditioners less and taking pubic transports more often. 這句話用了不定式做目的狀語(yǔ)，Of course, the government should make/ set up laws to punish those enterprises which cause serious pollution. 這句話也使用了定語(yǔ)從句， it is of great necessity to improve the public awareness of environmental protection, which will benefit us in the long run.這句話用了it做形式主語(yǔ)和非限制性定語(yǔ)從句。