One possible version:
With the development of the Internet, there has come a kind of language called Web Language. Recently, our class has held a discussion on whether it’s good for students to use Web Language in writing compositions or communication.
40% of the students are not in favor of the idea of using Web Language, thinking it ridiculous to see or hear words which are not commonly used in our daily life. Worse still, it’s hard for them to make themselves understood. In their opinion, it is against Chinese grammar, and it’s not beneficial to students’ studies.
However, the rest of the students are fond of it. They think what they say will sound humorous, which makes the language more lively. Moreover, it is of special help for them to express themselves freely.
In my opinion, it is a phenomenon worth thinking about. I don’t think it good to use Web Language. It may be fashionable as some think, but you may also make your idea confusing, leaving other people at a loss.
試題分析：本篇寫作題材是對使用網(wǎng)絡語言的兩種不同觀點。這種文章一般層次比較清晰，四段：第一段為總述；第二段反對的觀點及依據(jù)；第三段贊同的觀點及依據(jù)；第四段自己觀點。要注意的是1.在列舉雙方依據(jù)時要盡量使語言多樣化；2.自我觀點表達時要有正確的判斷，要有辯證的思維。一篇文章需要有正確的句子才能明了清晰的表達作者的意思。考生應明白高考書面表達題既不是漢譯英，也不是可任意發(fā)揮的作文。它要求的是將所規(guī)定的材料內(nèi)容經(jīng)整理后展開思維，考查運用所學英語知識準確地表達意思的能力。
【亮點說明】本文較好完成了題目規(guī)定的任務，要點齊全、層次清楚、行文連貫。用詞不落俗套。如用not in favor of而不是多數(shù)考生會用的against表示“反對”，用fond of代替for. 在表達自己觀點的時候更是直截了當，Worse still, 更糟糕的是，起到連接的作用，I don’t think it good to use Web Language.體現(xiàn)了表達的多樣性。but you may also make your idea confusing, leaving other people at a loss.這句話使用了現(xiàn)在分詞做狀語。
