Question

最近，你們班召開了以“我的中國夢”為主題的班會活動。請寫一篇日記，記述班會情況及自己的感受。
內(nèi)容要點如下：　　1.每位同學都暢談了自己對中國夢的理解；　　
2.你談到了自己的夢想；　　
3.如何實現(xiàn)自己的夢想�！　�
注意：　　1. 總詞數(shù)120左右�！　　　　�
2. 可適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫。
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Answer 1

May 8           Wednesday           Sunny
Recently we had a class meeting on the topic of My Chinese Dream. Inspired by President Xi’s Chinese Dream, everyone talked enthusiastically about his understanding of the Chinese Dream. We all believe that this dream will come true in the future.
I also talked about my own dream. I have always wanted to be a doctor. Not only can doctors save people’s lives but also they are doing a respectable job. Doctors can also help people to live a better life with their professional knowledge.
To realize my dream, I must try to work hard from now on. I must learn as much as I can so that I can get into a good medical college, where I can prepare myself adequately for the job of a doctor. Only in this way can I accomplish my goal.

試題分析：題目要求寫一篇日記，陳述班會情況和自己的感受。使用第一人稱進行作文，時態(tài)以一般過去時和一般現(xiàn)在時為主，多使用定語從句、倒裝、狀語從句等語法知識。
亮點說明：范文使用了較多的重點語法知識：非謂語動詞Inspired by President Xi’s Chinese Dream, To realize my dream；賓語從句believe that this dream will come true in the future.；倒裝Not only can doctors save people’s lives，Only in this way can I accomplish my goal.；目的狀語從句so that I can get into a good medical college；非限制性定語從句where I can prepare myself adequately for the job等，重點語法知識的使用，給作文增色很多；
范文還使用了一些固定短語和固定搭配：talked about；not only...but also；live a better life；try to；from now on；
as much as I can等，使作文內(nèi)容顯得比較充實。