Question

前不久，中央電視臺“焦點訪談”欄目曾就“中國式過馬路”現(xiàn)象進行了不少采訪和評論。請用英語寫一篇100-120 詞的短文，結(jié)合自己的所見所聞或親身經(jīng)歷描述“行人闖紅燈”(pedestrians run the red light)引發(fā)的若干問題，并就此提出一些解決措施。 注意;短文的開頭已給出(不計詞數(shù))。
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Answer 1

One possible version
Not long ago, CCTV “Focus Talk” carried out many interviews and made some relevant comments on the phenomena---“Crossing roads in the Chinese style”.
There is a very common phenomenon around us that people just run the light totally ignoring the running vehicles, which can lead to serious consequences. Last week a traffic accident happened near our school, a rushing car knocked down a student who was running the red light. And because of the car’s sudden stop, several cars behind crashed into each other. Of course this caused a terrible traffic jam
In my opinion, effective measures should be taken to solve the problem. First, we can make good use of the media, such as TV, newspaper, magazine, to raise people’s awareness of obeying the traffic rules and road safety. Second, government must make severe laws to punish people who dare to break the law and run the red light.

試題分析：本文的話題是“中國式過馬路”就是指一些人不顧紅燈，直接過馬路。原因和危害在要點里都列了出來�？捶ê拖Ｍ�：考生可以提出加強交通安全教育，以多種方式提升國民的交通意識等等。從這些方面著手。提綱作文要求考生根據(jù)所給的寫作要求和提綱，確定文章的中心思想，然后緊緊圍繞中心思想展開寫作。要求考生在保證內(nèi)容要點全部概括的基礎(chǔ)上可以充分發(fā)揮自己的想象，進而用自己的語言來表達某種觀點或看法，增添了寫作的靈活性，同時能較好地考查考生的想象能力和英語語言表達能力。
【亮點說明】這篇文章涵蓋了要點，簡潔又不乏好的短語和句型：because of因為,由于， crashed into撞上， In my opinion在我看來, make good use of充分利用，There is a very common phenomenon around us that people just run the light totally ignoring the running vehicles, which can lead to serious consequences. 這句話使用了分隔式同位語從句和定語從句，Last week a traffic accident happened near our school, a rushing car knocked down a student who was running the red light. 這句話也使用了定語從句，government must make severe laws to punish people who dare to break the law and run the red light. 這句話用了不定式做目的狀語和定語從句。
還有范文還使用了First, Second這樣的關(guān)聯(lián)詞使文章更加連貫。