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前不久，中央電視臺(tái)“焦點(diǎn)訪談”欄目曾就“中國(guó)式過(guò)馬路”現(xiàn)象進(jìn)行了不少采訪和評(píng)論。請(qǐng)用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇100-120 詞的短文，結(jié)合自己的所見(jiàn)所聞或親身經(jīng)歷描述“行人闖紅燈”(pedestrians run the red light)引發(fā)的若干問(wèn)題，并就此提出一些解決措施。 注意;短文的開(kāi)頭已給出(不計(jì)詞數(shù))。
Not long ago, CCTV “Focus Talk” carried out many interviews and made some relevant comments on the phenomena---“Crossing roads in the Chinese style”._________________________________________________
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Not long ago, CCTV “Focus Talk” carried out many interviews and made some relevant comments on the phenomena---“Crossing roads in the Chinese style”.
There is a very common phenomenon around us that people just run the light totally ignoring the running vehicles, which can lead to serious consequences. Last week a traffic accident happened near our school, a rushing car knocked down a student who was running the red light. And because of the car’s sudden stop, several cars behind crashed into each other. Of course this caused a terrible traffic jam
In my opinion, effective measures should be taken to solve the problem. First, we can make good use of the media, such as TV, newspaper, magazine, to raise people’s awareness of obeying the traffic rules and road safety. Second, government must make severe laws to punish people who dare to break the law and run the red light.

試題分析：本文的話題是“中國(guó)式過(guò)馬路”就是指一些人不顧紅燈，直接過(guò)馬路。原因和危害在要點(diǎn)里都列了出來(lái)�？捶ê拖Ｍ�：考生可以提出加強(qiáng)交通安全教育，以多種方式提升國(guó)民的交通意識(shí)等等。從這些方面著手。提綱作文要求考生根據(jù)所給的寫(xiě)作要求和提綱，確定文章的中心思想，然后緊緊圍繞中心思想展開(kāi)寫(xiě)作。要求考生在保證內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)全部概括的基礎(chǔ)上可以充分發(fā)揮自己的想象，進(jìn)而用自己的語(yǔ)言來(lái)表達(dá)某種觀點(diǎn)或看法，增添了寫(xiě)作的靈活性，同時(shí)能較好地考查考生的想象能力和英語(yǔ)語(yǔ)言表達(dá)能力。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這篇文章涵蓋了要點(diǎn)，簡(jiǎn)潔又不乏好的短語(yǔ)和句型：because of因?yàn)?由于， crashed into撞上， In my opinion在我看來(lái), make good use of充分利用，There is a very common phenomenon around us that people just run the light totally ignoring the running vehicles, which can lead to serious consequences. 這句話使用了分隔式同位語(yǔ)從句和定語(yǔ)從句，Last week a traffic accident happened near our school, a rushing car knocked down a student who was running the red light. 這句話也使用了定語(yǔ)從句，government must make severe laws to punish people who dare to break the law and run the red light. 這句話用了不定式做目的狀語(yǔ)和定語(yǔ)從句。
還有范文還使用了First, Second這樣的關(guān)聯(lián)詞使文章更加連貫。