Question

閱讀下面的短文, 然后按照要求寫(xiě)一篇150詞左右的英語(yǔ)短文。
In 1882 a baby girl caught a fever that was so fierce that she nearly died. She survived but the fever left its mark ― she could no longer see or hear. Because she could not hear,  she also found it very difficult to speak. So how did this child, blinded and deafened at 19 months old, grow up to become a world-famous author and public speaker?
The fever cut her off from the outside world, depriving her of sight and sound. It was as if she had been thrown into a dark prison cell from which there could be no release. Luckily Helen was not someone who gave up easily. Soon she began to explore the world by using her other senses.
Just before her seventh birthday, the family hired a private tutor ― Anne Sullivan. Anne was careful to teach Helen especially those subjects in which she was interested.
Helen proved to be a remarkable scholar, graduating with honours from Radcliffe College in 1904. She had phenomenal powers of concentration and memory, as well as a dogged determination to succeed. While she was still at college she wrote “The Story of My Life”. This was an immediate success and earned her enough money to buy her own house.
She toured the country, giving lecture after lecture. Many books were written about her and several plays and films were made about her life. Eventually she became so famous that she was invited abroad and received many honours from foreign universities and monarchs. In 1932 she became a vice-president of the Royal National Institute for the Blind in the United Kingdom.
【寫(xiě)作內(nèi)容】
1. 概括短文的內(nèi)容要點(diǎn), 該部分的字?jǐn)?shù)大約30詞;
2. 就“殘疾人需要我們的關(guān)心”這個(gè)主題發(fā)表你的看法, 至少包含以下的內(nèi)容要點(diǎn), 該部分的大約120詞:
a) 以你認(rèn)識(shí)或了解的殘疾人為例, 簡(jiǎn)述殘疾人面臨的困難及其取得的成就;
b) 舉例說(shuō)明人們是怎樣關(guān)心和幫助殘疾人的, 還存在哪些不足之處;
c) 呼吁大家都來(lái)關(guān)心和幫助殘疾人。
【寫(xiě)作要求】
可以使用實(shí)例或其它論述方法支持你的論點(diǎn)，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子。
【評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)】
概括準(zhǔn)確、語(yǔ)言規(guī)范、內(nèi)容合適，篇章連貫。

Answer 1

One possible version：
The passage tells us a story of a great disabled woman ,Hellen Keller , who overcame the difficulties that she faced with a strong will , and achieved fantastic achievements in her life .
As is known , disabled people have to over come much more difficulties than non-disabled people .Take Zhang Haidi for example .Zhang who has been unable to walk since she was five , never went to school , but has studied politics , literature, medical science and several foreign languages ,She also talks to other disabled pople on the Internet , giving them encouragement to succeed in their own lives .
Nowadays more and more people are concerned about the disabled by encouraging them to struggle for success , helping them with their study and work .But many disabled people are still looked down upon, who can’t get equal opportunities such as good jobs, just owing to their disabilities .
If I had the chance to say one thing to the world , it would be like this:Just having a disability doesn’t mean your life is meant to be in the dark .Let’s accept the disabled as they are and give them encouragement to live as rich and full a life as we do ! 

試題分析：按照寫(xiě)作要求在寫(xiě)概要部分，除了明確文章主題外，還應(yīng)抓住六個(gè)要素：when, where, who, what, why, how。在這六個(gè)要素中，所占內(nèi)容比重最大的是what，但是因?yàn)橐�求大約30個(gè)詞，所以不要寫(xiě)的過(guò)于詳細(xì)。本篇文章提供了三個(gè)要點(diǎn)：舉例說(shuō)明殘疾人面臨的困難和取得的成就；現(xiàn)在是如何去幫助殘疾人的；發(fā)出呼吁號(hào)召，所以可以用三個(gè)段落來(lái)進(jìn)行謀篇布局。寫(xiě)作時(shí)要注意使用適當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞進(jìn)行連詞成篇，盡量做到多種句式的交錯(cuò)使用和的長(zhǎng)短句結(jié)合，以增強(qiáng)文章的可讀性。最后呼吁大家來(lái)關(guān)心和幫助殘疾人的時(shí)候可以使用祈使句，或者虛擬語(yǔ)氣來(lái)增強(qiáng)語(yǔ)言的感染力。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文在結(jié)構(gòu)上符合讀寫(xiě)任務(wù)的布局要求，首先概述了材料內(nèi)容，然后發(fā)表自己對(duì)這件事的看法，再介紹對(duì)殘疾人的幫助和關(guān)心，最后發(fā)出呼吁和號(hào)召。在文中用到了定語(yǔ)從句who can’t get equal opportunities such as good jobs, just owing to their disabilities .條件狀語(yǔ)從句If I had the chance to say one thing to the world , it would be like this:和祈使句.Let’s accept the disabled as they are and give them encouragement to live as rich and full a life as we do !這種復(fù)合句的使用不僅顯示了較強(qiáng)的邏輯性，也顯示了作者對(duì)句型句式的準(zhǔn)確把握。在描述張海迪的經(jīng)歷以及提出建議時(shí)所使用的簡(jiǎn)單句使文章長(zhǎng)短句結(jié)合，句式更富于變化，更為靈動(dòng)，也增強(qiáng)了文章的號(hào)召。