Question

2014年春晚上, 一曲《時(shí)間都去哪兒了》戳中所有人淚點(diǎn)。伴隨我們成長(zhǎng)，父母在不經(jīng)意間老去, 全社會(huì)都沉浸在對(duì)父母的感恩中, 你也頗有感觸, 請(qǐng)以此為主題, 寫(xiě)一篇感想。
附歌詞: ……記憶中的小腳丫，肉嘟嘟的小嘴巴，一生把愛(ài)交給他，只為那一聲爸媽;時(shí)間都去哪兒了,還沒(méi)好好感受年輕就老了, 生兒養(yǎng)女一輩子，滿腦子都是孩子哭了笑了;時(shí)間都去哪兒了，還沒(méi)好好看看你眼睛就花了，柴米油鹽半輩子, 轉(zhuǎn)眼就只剩下滿臉的皺紋了……
要求:
1. 歌詞僅供參考，請(qǐng)勿逐句翻譯。
2. 文中應(yīng)包括對(duì)父母付出的回憶, 和對(duì)如何感恩父母的反思。可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)加以發(fā)揮。
3. 詞數(shù)120左右。文章開(kāi)頭已給，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。參考詞匯： 皺紋 wrinkle
The audiences were all moved to tears by the song Where has the time gone in the Spring Festival Gala (春晚) of this year.
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Answer 1

The audiences were all moved to tears by the song Where has the time gone in the Spring Festival Gala(春晚) of this year. 
Every time I enjoy the song, I can’t hold back the tears in my eyes. To provide me with better educational opportunities, my parents have always been overworking without any complaints. Exhausting as his work was, my father always took me to school by bike when I was very young. I also owe my gratitude to my mother, who is always there whenever I have trouble.
It’s only when we find their grey hair and wrinkles that we realize they’re getting older. As a student, I can’t afford to buy them expensive gifts now, but I can help with their housework. What’s more , I’m determined to work harder to let them feel proud of me in the future.

試題分析：這是一篇半開(kāi)放的書(shū)面表達(dá)，題目要求根據(jù)歌曲《時(shí)間都去哪兒了》寫(xiě)一篇感想。作文應(yīng)包含對(duì)父母付出的回憶和對(duì)如何感恩父母的反思。具體內(nèi)容要考生自己拓展，個(gè)人的想法和經(jīng)歷不同，答案也千差萬(wàn)別，但是考生應(yīng)該注意表達(dá)觀點(diǎn)的時(shí)候，要注意遣詞造句，要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型，如強(qiáng)調(diào)句，倒裝句等，讓文章更上檔次。同時(shí)在列舉措施的時(shí)候要使用合適的連接詞如：First，second， Besides, What’s more等，讓文章看起來(lái)很有條理，也很流暢。還要注意使用第一人稱進(jìn)行寫(xiě)作，注意單詞拼寫(xiě)、標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)、時(shí)態(tài)和語(yǔ)法知識(shí)的正確應(yīng)用。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】范文使用了一些重點(diǎn)語(yǔ)法知識(shí)：時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句Every time I enjoy the song, when I was very young；讓步狀語(yǔ)從句Exhausting as his work was；非限制性定語(yǔ)從句who is always there whenever I have trouble；強(qiáng)調(diào)句型It’s only when we find their grey hair and wrinkles that we realize they’re getting older.；現(xiàn)在完成進(jìn)行時(shí)my parents have always been overworking等，顯示了較強(qiáng)的語(yǔ)法基礎(chǔ)；范文使用了一些短語(yǔ)：hold back, help with, feel proud of, in the future, As a student等，使文章內(nèi)容充實(shí)，范文使用了較多的固定搭配和固定句型：provide me with, owe my gratitude to my mother, I can’t afford to buy them expensive gifts now, I’m determined to work harder等，遣詞造句和文章結(jié)構(gòu)安排得很合理；范文注意使用As a student, What’s more等來(lái)銜接上下文。