Question

目前，大多數(shù)高中生選擇住校。在寢室里同學們難免會發(fā)生一些小摩擦。上周二晚上十點半，張方和李華爭吵（張方熬夜學習，李華認為影響睡覺......），你當時在場，幫助解決了他們之間的矛盾。請用英語寫一篇關于這件事情的短文。詞數(shù)：100-120。
你的文章應包括下列要點：
①張方和李華發(fā)生爭吵     ②你幫助解決矛盾       ③你的看法
注意：①文章的標題和開頭已給出（不計入總詞數(shù)）。
②參考詞匯： harmonious   adj. 和諧的   dormitory  n.宿舍
Creating a Harmonious Environment
Nowadays, as many students live in the school dormitories, it is hard to avoid quarrels.
                                                                              
                                                                              

Answer 1

Creating a Harmonious Environment
Nowadays, as many students live in the school dormitories, it is hard to avoid quarrels. Last Tuesday Zhang Fang stayed up doing his homework after 10:30 pm in the dormitory. Feeling tired, Li Hua went to bed immediately. But he couldn’t fall asleep with lights on. He got so angry that he lost his temper, complaining about Zhang’s selfishness. Neither of them would give in and the quarrel continued.
While they were quarreling, I tried to calm them down, saying all of us should care about others. They realized their faults and made up finally.
After all, we share the same school and everyone is part of the big family. Whenever we face any problem, we should learn to understand and communicate with each other. Only when we think more for others can we create a harmonious environment.

試題分析：這是一篇提綱類書面表達，文章的要點也基本上都給出來了，但是不是很具體，考生要把要點解釋清楚，不能有遺漏。除了表達這些要點以外，還要闡述自己的觀點，這就要求考生自己拓展發(fā)揮，在寫作的過程中，要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型，如強調(diào)句，倒裝句等，讓文章更上檔次。同時在列舉措施的時候要使用合適的連接詞如：First，second， Besides, What’s more等，讓文章看起來很有條理，也很流暢。本篇文章在寫作時不要啰嗦，力求簡潔。
【亮點說明】所給范文語言簡潔，運用了一些詞組和句型： stayed up熬夜，give in 屈服，calm sb. down使…冷靜下來， care about關心， made up組成，After all畢竟,  Feeling tired, Li Hua went to bed immediately. 這句話用了現(xiàn)在分詞做狀語，But he couldn’t fall asleep with lights on. 這句話用了with復合結(jié)構(gòu)，He got so angry that he lost his temper, complaining about Zhang’s selfishness. 這句話用了so…that…從句和現(xiàn)在分詞做狀語， Whenever we face any problem, we should learn to understand and communicate with each other. 這句話用了讓步狀語從句，Only when we think more for others can we create a harmonious environment. 這句話用了倒裝句。