Question

在緊張的高二備考階段，英語王老師為了提高復習效率，廣泛征求學生意見，并借此訓練學生的書面表達能力。假如你叫張華，請根據以下提示，給老師寫封信，表達你的需求和建議。
● 為夯實基礎，適當放慢進度，留出思考和消化的時間；
● 請反復訓練易錯的知識點，提供典型試題；
●…… （個人補充）
●…… （個人補充）
●…… （個人補充）
注意：
1．短文必須包括以上要點以及個人的補充要求或建議，不要逐句翻譯，可適當增加細節(jié)以使行文連貫。
2. 參考詞匯：lay a solid foundation打下堅實的基礎  slow down減緩速度；放慢速度
3．詞數：120個左右。開頭已給出，不計詞數。
Dear Mr .Wang,
Thank you for providing us with an opportunity to share our views．
In the course of the general revision,_________________________________
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Yours
Zhang Hua

Answer 1

Dear Mr. Wang,
Thank you for providing us with an opportunity to share our views．
In the course of the general revision, what we need is solid foundation．So please slow down and make sure we have really mastered what we learn．Besides, we need a little more time to think for ourselves and to digest．As for those confusing points where we often make mistakes, would you please provide us with typical exercises to practice more? Meanwhile, we need your guidance on writing, for example, how to think in English and write in idiomatic English．I still have another request: select exercises of high quality and assign us less homework．
By the way, as the examination is drawing near, we often feel frustrated, which has a very bad effect on our study．We would appreciate it if you would give us some encouragement from time to time．
Yours
Zhang Hua

試題分析：本題是寫一篇給定要求的書信，寫作的話題為給老師提出學習的建議，內容包括建議老師適當放慢進度，留出思考和消化的時間；建議老師反復訓練易錯的知識點，提供典型試題；建議老師對英語寫作進行指導；建議老師布置高質量的練習，安排更少的作業(yè)；同時寫上對老師的感激以及對于即將到來的測試所表現出來的心情，在寫作時應注意書信的格式，同時注意寫作內容要符合題意，在寫作的過程中，要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型，如強調句，倒裝句等，讓文章更上檔次。注重語言的準確性和連貫性。
【亮點說明】所給范文條理清晰，語言簡潔，應用了一些較好的詞組和句子：provide sb. with提供某人某物， of high quality高質量， By the way順便說一下, what we need is solid foundation．這句話用了主語從句，So please slow down and make sure we have really mastered what we learn．這句話用了賓語從句， As for those confusing points where we often make mistakes, 這句話用了定語從句， as the examination is drawing near, we often feel frustrated, which has a very bad effect on our study．這句話用了非限制性定語從句，We would appreciate it if you would give us some encouragement from time to time．這句話用了it做形式賓語。還有范文還使用了Besides,這樣的關聯詞使文章更加連貫。