Question

請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下提, Never be afraid of making mistakes. In fact, making progress is making mistakes. Mistakes are where success lies.并結(jié)合自己生活中的一個(gè)事例，用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇短文。
注意：1．無(wú)須寫(xiě)標(biāo)題，不得照抄英語(yǔ)提示語(yǔ)； 
2．除詩(shī)歌外，文體不限；
3．文中不得透露個(gè)人姓名和學(xué)校名稱(chēng)；
4．詞數(shù)為120左右。
注意：文章首句已給出。
Mistakes are unavoidable in life.___________________________________________________________

Answer 1

Mistakes are unavoidable in life. But attitudes towards them may make a difference.
I still remember how my spoken English improved. At the beginning, I always keep silent in the oral class to avoid making mistakes. Before long my teacher knew about my situation. He encouraged me to speak out what I wanted to regardless of mistakes. Whenever I make mistakes and felt discouraged, my teacher and classmates would help me figure out how I could avoid them in the future. Practice makes perfect. With time going by, I built up my confidence and now I can talk fluently in English, just as the saying goes, mistakes are where success lies. We just need to learn a lesson from the mistakes.
So don’t be afraid of making mistakes, learn from them, and success is just awaiting us.

試題分析：考查開(kāi)放性作文寫(xiě)作,開(kāi)放性作文給出了一個(gè)話題，并有部分的文字提示。給考生自由發(fā)揮的余地較大。對(duì)于考生的綜合能力要求較高，要求考生有很強(qiáng)的謀篇布局的能力和組織要點(diǎn)的能力。在完成開(kāi)放性作文時(shí)，首先要選擇自己熟悉的短語(yǔ)或者句型，在你的能力范圍之內(nèi)，選擇句式時(shí)要賦予變化，因?yàn)檫@樣你才可以更好的駕馭。同時(shí)也要選擇合適的連接詞，把各個(gè)要點(diǎn)組織成一個(gè)完整的整體，如besides, further, last but not least等。在發(fā)表個(gè)人觀點(diǎn)的時(shí)候，可以使用諺語(yǔ)來(lái)提升整個(gè)文章的檔次和文采，也能增加得高分的可能性。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】文章使用了很好的短語(yǔ)和句子： make a difference有影響，有差別，. At the beginning一開(kāi)始,
keep silent保持沉默， avoid making mistakes. 避免犯錯(cuò)，be afraid of害怕， He encouraged me to speak out what I wanted to regardless of mistakes. 這句話用了賓語(yǔ)從句，Whenever I make mistakes and felt discouraged, my teacher and classmates would help me figure out how I could avoid them in the future.這句話用了讓步狀語(yǔ)從句， With time going by, I built up my confidence and now I can talk fluently in English, just as the saying goes, mistakes are where success lies. 這句話用了with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)， Practice makes perfect. 和mistakes are where success lies.這兩句是諺語(yǔ)，用在這里很恰當(dāng)。