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目前我國(guó)中學(xué)生的健康狀況越來(lái)越差，這使父母、學(xué)校和專(zhuān)家感到憂(yōu)慮。為解決這一問(wèn)題，有些人提出將體育納入高考。請(qǐng)結(jié)合實(shí)際談?wù)勀愕目捶ā?br />注意：①文中不得透露個(gè)人姓名和學(xué)校名稱(chēng)；  ②可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；③ 詞數(shù)不少于120。

Answer 1

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The fact that high school students are currently experiencing a sharp decline in health has aroused wide concern among parents, schools and experts. To have this problem solved, some people propose that PE be included as a subject in the College Entrance Examination.
I’m against the idea because it is by no means practical. Setting up standards for the exam alone may well be a hard task. It is far beyond our ability to manage such a nationwide exam in the sports field.
However, good health is an essential foundation of learning. Only when one is in good health can he guarantee efficient learning. Therefore, it is schools’ responsibility to help develop their students’ awareness of the importance of keeping fit. Moreover, schools should provide sufficient sports facilities for their students to have regular exercise.

試題分析：本文是一篇短文寫(xiě)作，擺現(xiàn)象談看法。要求提示雖然不詳細(xì)，但內(nèi)容很明確，考生也比較容易把握寫(xiě)作要求和寫(xiě)作目的�？忌�在寫(xiě)作之前要認(rèn)真審題，根據(jù)提示寫(xiě)作主要有三部分內(nèi)容，第一段開(kāi)門(mén)見(jiàn)山擺出現(xiàn)象目前我國(guó)中學(xué)生的健康狀況越來(lái)越差，這使父母、學(xué)校和專(zhuān)家感到憂(yōu)慮。為解決這一問(wèn)題，有些人提出將體育納入高考；第二段表達(dá)自己的看法肯定或否定都可，陳述理由；第三段如若反對(duì)表達(dá)更好的建議。另外，要注意文章的時(shí)態(tài)，用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。人稱(chēng)用第一、三人稱(chēng)。還要注意句子的銜接，以提高作文的檔次。
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