Question

今年，你將高三畢業(yè)。為使即將升入本校的高一新生的高中生活更順利，學(xué)校的《英語(yǔ)學(xué)習(xí)園地》請(qǐng)你給他們留言，提出一些中肯的建議。請(qǐng)根據(jù)下面的提示，用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇短文。
1．合理分配學(xué)習(xí)、鍛煉和休息時(shí)間；
2．搞好與老帥和同學(xué)之間的關(guān)系；
3．積極參加校社團(tuán)活動(dòng)。
注意：1．詞數(shù)：不少于100詞；
2．可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

Answer 1

One possible version:
Here are some suggestions for you ,which may help you enjoy your school life better.
As senior high school students. You will be living a very busy life. So first of all ，you should arrange your time properly .You’d better make a timetable so that you know when to study, exercise and rest. Only in this way can you make good use of every minute .Besides ,while in school，it is wise to develop a pleasant relationship with teachers and classmates .When you have a problem that you can’t work it out alone ,you’d better turn to your teachers or classmates for help .Of course you should lend a helping hand when necessary .Last but not least ,I advise you to take an active part in societies at school ,which will give you good chances to make friends and challenge yourselves.
I hope the suggestions above will help you go through a rich and colorful school life .I’m sure that a beautiful future is waiting you.

試題分析：本文是一篇提綱式命題作文，要求給學(xué)校的《英語(yǔ)學(xué)習(xí)園地》請(qǐng)你給他們留言，提出一些中肯的建議。命題中給出了三個(gè)寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn),因此考生需要仔細(xì)審題，把握主題，寫(xiě)作中要包含所有提示要點(diǎn)，根據(jù)要點(diǎn)進(jìn)行適當(dāng)?shù)暮侠淼陌l(fā)揮和想象。文章要注意遣詞造句，注重句式變化，調(diào)動(dòng)自己多年以來(lái)的英語(yǔ)積累和語(yǔ)言儲(chǔ)備，寫(xiě)出富于變化，有利于高中生活的短文。結(jié)合所給材料,可知本文主要是用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)進(jìn)行敘述,人稱(chēng)以第二人稱(chēng)為主.由于是提供建議,寫(xiě)作中注意使用連詞,或者序數(shù)詞,做到上下文聯(lián)系緊密,符合邏輯關(guān)系.
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】文中使用了非常好的短語(yǔ)和句子為文章增色不少，比如living a very busy life, take an active part in;短語(yǔ)Only in this way can you make good use of every minute的倒裝句及when引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間從句等等。并注意了句子的銜接如：So first of all , Besides，Last but not least等等。