Question

假如你是李華，在英國某中學(xué)參加了為期一個(gè)月的交換生交流活動(dòng)。請(qǐng)你給該校校長Mr Black寫一封電子郵件，表示感謝。
內(nèi)容主要包括：
1．感謝幫助（包括提供的活動(dòng)，贈(zèng)送的禮物）；
2．交流感受（了解了英國文化、提高了英語水平）；
3．歡迎來訪。
注意：1．字?jǐn)?shù)100左右；
2．可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
3．郵件開頭和結(jié)尾以為你寫好。
Dear Mr Black,
I am writing to express my thanks for…
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Best wishes.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua

Answer 1

One possible version:
Dear Black,
I am writing to express my thanks for your kind help during my visit in England. Many thanks for all the things you have done for us. And thank you for the gift you sent me. It’s one of the best gifts I have ever got.
During my stay in your country, you offered us such good opportunities to communicate with you and your students. Therefore, I have learned more about English culture and my English has improved a lot. Besides, I have made several good friends there.
I am looking forward to your early visit to China so that I will show you around our country.
Thank you again for your kind help.
Best wishes.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua

試題分析：本文是篇材料作文，材料簡(jiǎn)明扼要，學(xué)生很容易把握寫作要求�？忌�在寫作之前必修認(rèn)真審題，首先要注意文章的時(shí)態(tài)，要求有三條，1. 表示謝意，用thanks for 或者thank you for ... 2. 對(duì)交流的回顧和感受，要用到一般過去時(shí)或者現(xiàn)在完成。3. 歡迎來訪。要求讓你給Mr Black寫信，因此本文必須用第一人稱。再有就是不能根據(jù)材料逐字逐句的翻譯，應(yīng)該注意句子的銜接，以提高作文的檔次。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】文中正確地運(yùn)用了不同的時(shí)態(tài)并運(yùn)用了豐富的語言。文章第一段就運(yùn)用了三個(gè)定語從句，表達(dá)感謝之情，運(yùn)用了不同的表示謝意的表達(dá)方式避免重復(fù)，如 thanks for ，many thanks for, thank you for, 說明作者有豐富的語言積累并恰當(dāng)?shù)剡\(yùn)用了make good friends， looking forward to，show around , so that 從句等等,為文章增色不少\。同時(shí)作者還注意了句子的銜接，如運(yùn)用：And ，Therefore, Besides, 等等，提高了評(píng)分的檔次。