Question

你將參加國際中學(xué)生環(huán)境論壇，就霧霾天氣（the haze weather）這一問題發(fā)表演講。請你用英語寫一篇120字左右的發(fā)言稿。
描述霧霾 (frog and haze) 對身體和生活造成的不良影響。
建議民眾和政府分別采取哪些具體行動來維護(hù)空氣質(zhì)量。
提示：開頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫好，不計入字?jǐn)?shù)。
Ladies and gentlemen,
I feel it a great honor to have a chance to give a speech here, talking about…

Answer 1

Ladies and gentlemen,
I feel it a great honor to have a chance to give a speech here, talking about haze which is mixed up with dust, smoke and so on. This kind of air pollutant comes from a variety of natural and manmade sources. Natural sources can include windblown dust, and smoke from wildfires. Manmade sources can include motor vehicles, and industrial fuel burning, and manufacturing operations. One of the main causes of haze is manufacturing operations. Many factories are producing more smog than the standard and the smog seriously influence the air。
The components that make up haze may have negative effect on people's health especially that of children and the elderly. Also not excluded are those who have certain diseases Workers working in the open air have a high risk in their health.
One of effective solutions to help deal with haze is to make some chemistry changes during the manufacturing process,which could reduce harmful emissions  produced by manufacturing operations

試題分析：這是一篇發(fā)言稿，所以在語言的使用上要大眾化，動筆前，一定要認(rèn)真分析要點，理解要點要表達(dá)的含義，不能遺漏要點，跑題偏題。話題是霧霾 (frog and haze) 對身體和生活造成的不良影響。
建議民眾和政府分別采取哪些具體行動來維護(hù)空氣質(zhì)量。本作文中給出的要點比較簡略,故需要充實文章內(nèi)容，需要注意不要偏離文章中心。寫作時注意準(zhǔn)確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式。還要用適當(dāng)?shù)年P(guān)聯(lián)詞把句子串聯(lián)起來，使文章更加連貫。平時除了加強詞匯積累，寫作聯(lián)系以外，還可以適當(dāng)記憶一些類似的范文，這樣在考試中可以起到事半功倍的效果。
【亮點說明】The components that make up haze may have negative effect on people's health especially that of children and the elderly. 這句話有定語從句和that的用法，Also not excluded are those who have certain diseases Workers working in the open air have a high risk in their health.這句話是倒裝句， One of effective solutions to help deal with haze is to make some chemistry changes during the manufacturing process,which could reduce harmful emissions  produced by manufacturing operations這句話有不定式做表語，which引導(dǎo)的定語從句和過去分詞做定語。