Question

“中國夢”已經(jīng)成為一個社會熱點(diǎn)話題，根據(jù)最近央視的社會調(diào)查，不同的人群有不同的夢想。請結(jié)合表格提示，用英語寫一篇關(guān)于“中國夢(China Dream)”的演講稿。

不同人群	夢想
城市居民	交通…、環(huán)境…
大學(xué)生	就業(yè)…、食品…
農(nóng)民	教育…、醫(yī)療…
你的夢想	（請考生根據(jù)自己的經(jīng)歷或感想，提出至少兩個夢想）

 
注意:
1. 對所給提示逐一陳述，適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，不要簡單翻譯。
2. 詞數(shù)150 左右。開頭已經(jīng)寫好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。
3. 作文中不得提及有關(guān)考生個人身份的任何信息，如校名、人名等。
China Dream
“China Dream” has become a hot topic among Chinese people. According to a recent survey by CCTV, different groups of people have different dreams.

Answer 1

                          Chinese Dream
“Chinese Dream” has become a hot topic among Chinese people. According to a recent survey by CCTV, different groups of people have different dreams.
Urban residents dream of having easy access to modern transportation so that life will be easier and more convenient. Besides, they hope to enjoy a better living environment and more public facilities. What college students are mainly concerned about is employment. So their dream is to have well-paid jobs where they can bring their potentials into full play. Meanwhile, they hope the government will strengthen its supervision over food so that people can have more pollution-free and green food. When it comes to the farmers, they hope that they can enjoy good and affordable medical care and their children can receive a good education.
As far as I am concerned, my dream is to be enrolled by a good university and be a talent who can make contributions to my country. Besides, I dream there to be practical reforms in education so that high school students have enough time to sleep and exercise.

試題分析：本文屬于提綱類作文，寫好提綱式作文的關(guān)鍵是認(rèn)真審題和分析所給的提綱，因此考生首先要認(rèn)真閱讀前面的提示，認(rèn)清寫作要求和提綱之間的關(guān)系，然后確定文章的主題、文體、人稱和時態(tài)。根據(jù)所給提綱，列出要點(diǎn)，并以此為基礎(chǔ)充分發(fā)揮自己的想象力，靈活運(yùn)用英語知識，采用不同的表達(dá)方式將各要點(diǎn)完整地表述出來，注意主次分明，詳略得當(dāng)。語言力求準(zhǔn)確、簡潔。根據(jù)情景的發(fā)展，按順序安排好材料。同時應(yīng)選用合適的連接詞或過渡詞，使文章具有一定的連貫性。考生必須認(rèn)真查驗(yàn)是否有漏寫情況，有無拼寫錯誤及標(biāo)點(diǎn)誤用等。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】Urban residents dream of having easy access to modern transportation so that life will be easier and more convenient. 這句話用了so that引導(dǎo)的結(jié)果狀語從句， What college students are mainly concerned about is employment. 這句話是主語從句，So their dream is to have well-paid jobs where they can bring their potentials into full play. 這句話里面有不定式做表語，和地點(diǎn)狀語，When it comes to the farmers, they hope that they can enjoy good and affordable medical care and their children can receive a good education.這句話是When it comes to這個句型，my dream is to be enrolled by a good university and be a talent who can make contributions to my country. 這句話里面有定語從句，還有Besides, Meanwhile, As far as I am concerned,這樣的關(guān)聯(lián)詞使文章更連貫。