Question

一項(xiàng)社會(huì)調(diào)查發(fā)現(xiàn)，目前許多在城市上班的子女因?yàn)楣ぷ鞯仍�因每年只能回鄉(xiāng)下老家或者甚至常年沒回家，忽視了家里年邁的父母。老人常常盼著子女回家吃飯或者哪怕打個(gè)電話，可是經(jīng)常希望落空。請(qǐng)用英語寫一篇短文反應(yīng)此情況，說說你的感想，并呼吁全社會(huì)來關(guān)心老年人。詞數(shù)：120左右。

Answer 1

Nowadays, many young people who work in big cities rarely return home to see their old parents, who, however, expect their children to be back to have dinners with them, or just make a phone call every day, especially during festivals. As a result, their expects often become disappointments.
In my opinion, the old don’t ask for much. They simply hope their children can come back, talk with them and have a meal together. But the young fail to do so. They think the old are satisfied as long as they have enough to eat and drink. In fact, they can easily get lonely and they often miss their children. So the young should spend more time with their parents and also it’s time that our society took some measures to solve this problem and call on everyone to care about the old. Only in this way can we make our society more beautiful.

試題分析：這是一篇提綱類書面表達(dá)，文章的要點(diǎn)也基本上都給出來了，而且很具體，考生要把要點(diǎn)解釋清楚，不能有遺漏。除了表達(dá)這些要點(diǎn)以外，還要闡述自己的觀點(diǎn)，這就要求考生自己拓展發(fā)揮，在寫作的過程中，要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型，如強(qiáng)調(diào)句，倒裝句等，讓文章更上檔次。同時(shí)在列舉措施的時(shí)候要使用合適的連接詞如：First，second， Besides, What’s more等，讓文章看起來很有條理，也很流暢。本篇文章在寫作時(shí)不要啰嗦，力求簡(jiǎn)潔。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】所給范文語言簡(jiǎn)潔，運(yùn)用了好的詞組和句子：In my opinion 在我看來，ask for詢問，fail to do沒能做…， Nowadays, many young people who work in big cities rarely return home to see their old parents, who, however, expect their children to be back to have dinners with them, or just make a phone call every day, especially during festivals. 這句話用了定語從句， They think the old are satisfied as long as they have enough to eat and drink. 這句話用了條件狀語從句，So the young should spend more time with their parents and also it’s time that our society took some measures to solve this problem and call on everyone to care about the old. 這句話用了虛擬語氣，Only in this way can we make our society more beautiful.這句話用了倒裝句。