Question

你打算畢業(yè)后去美國留學(xué)，想咨詢你的美國朋友Chris， 請你根據(jù)以下提示寫一封信。
目的：增長見識，體驗文化；
困惑：語言障礙，學(xué)業(yè)壓力；
征求建議。
注意：1. 詞數(shù)不少于50
2. 可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。
3. 開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計入總次數(shù)。
Dear Chris，
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Yours
Joe

Answer 1

Dear Chris,
I’ve finally made my decision to go to American for further study after high school.
I’ve been longing to go to American, mainly for two reasons. One is that I can experience American culture, and the other is that I can broaden my mind in this country. But I have some worries. My English is a bit poor, especially spoken English. I’m afraid I’ll have trouble communicating. Besides, I may suffer from heavy pressure from college course.
I hope you can offer me some practical advice.
Look forward to your reply.
Yours
Joe

試題分析：本文是書信類作文，要求寫信咨詢你的美國朋友Chris關(guān)于美國留學(xué)的事情，文章的要點也基本上都給出來了，但不是很具體，考生要把要點解釋清楚，不能有遺漏，還要拓展內(nèi)容，要充實，在寫作的過程中，要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型，如強(qiáng)調(diào)句，倒裝句等，讓文章更上檔次。同時在列舉措施的時候要使用合適的連接詞如：First，second， Besides, What’s more等，讓文章看起來很有條理，也很流暢。本篇文章在寫作時不要啰嗦，力求簡潔。
【亮點說明】所給范文語言簡潔，應(yīng)用了一些較好的詞組和句子： make one’s decision to do決定做…，long to渴望， have trouble doing做…有困難，suffer from遭受， Look forward to 盼望，One is that I can experience American culture, and the other is that I can broaden my mind in this country. 這句話用了表語從句，還有范文使用了Besides這樣的詞使文章更加連貫。