Question

Scientists find that hard-working people live longer than average men and women. Career women are healthier than housewives. Evidence shows that the jobless are in poorer health than the job-holders. A study shows that whenever the employment rate increases by 1%, the death rate decreases correspondingly(相應(yīng)地) by 2%. All this comes down to one point: work is helpful to health.
Why is work good for health? It is because work keeps people busy, away from loneliness. Researches show that people feel unhappy, worried and lonely when they have nothing to do. Instead, the happiest are those who are busy. Work serves as a bridge between man and reality. By work, people come into contact with each other. By collective activities, they find friendship and warmth. This is helpful to health. The loss of work means the loss of everything. It affects man spiritually and makes him likely to disease.
Besides, work gives one a sense of fulfillment and a sense of achievement. Work makes one feel his value and status in society. When a writer finishes his writing or a teacher sees his students grow, they are happy beyond words.
[寫作內(nèi)容]
1.以約30個詞概括短文的要點；
2.然后以約120個詞就“努力學(xué)習(xí)，快樂生活”的主題發(fā)表看法，并包括如下要點：
(1)你贊同“努力學(xué)習(xí)也可以快樂生活”這一觀點嗎？簡要闡述理由。
(2)舉例說明你的同學(xué)是如何努力學(xué)習(xí)并保持健康樂觀的心態(tài)的？
(3)簡述如何才能做到努力學(xué)習(xí)并快樂生活？
[寫作要求]
在作文中可以使用自己親身的經(jīng)歷或虛構(gòu)的故事，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容但不得直接引用原文中
的句子；
2. 作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實姓名和學(xué)校名稱。
[評分標準] 概括準確，語言規(guī)范，內(nèi)容合適，篇章連貫。

Answer 1

Study hard and enjoy yourselves
The author highlights the effect of work on people’s health, because it can rid one of loneliness, and make one feel fruitful and proud of himself, which always contributes to a good body.
In common with the author, I agree that the harder you work, the happier you will be, as hard work can keep a person busy, give one a sense of achievement, and therefore he will be self-confident and feel happy.
Around me, some of my classmates work very hard, hoping to fulfill their dream. However, they don’t seem unhappy. Oppositely, they try to find fun even under the pressure of the NMET. For example, they may share the joy with others when working out a problem. Sometimes they may play a trick on his partner using the newly-learned idioms, thus refresh themselves quickly.
As for me, I think only when we truly experience what fun it is, can we spare no effort to study hard and meanwhile enjoy ourselves.

試題分析：題目要求用30個詞概括短文大意，然后以“努力學(xué)習(xí)，快樂生活”為題，寫一篇作文。作文可以分為三部分來寫，第一部分贊同該觀點并闡述理由；第二部分舉例說明同學(xué)的做法；第三部分簡述如何做到努力學(xué)習(xí)和快樂生活。使用第一人稱進行寫作，不要出現(xiàn)標點、拼寫和時態(tài)錯誤。
【亮點說明】范文注意使用and therefore, However, Oppositely, For example, Sometimes, thus, and meanwhile等銜接上下文，使作文看起來行文流暢、語意連貫；
范文使用了一些重要語法知識：賓語從句I agree that the harder you work, the happier you will be；固定句型 the harder you work, the happier you will be；非謂語動詞hoping to fulfill their dream，using the newly-learned idioms；倒裝句式only when we truly experience what fun it is, can we spare no effort to study hard等，語法知識掌握扎實，重點語法知識的使用，使作文提高了等級；
范文還使用了一些短語和固定搭配：share the joy with others；working out；play a trick on；As for me等，使作文較為充實。