Question

假如你是張華， 近日寫信給某英文報(bào)的編輯，反映目前人們?yōu)E養(yǎng)寵物的問題，希望得到媒體的關(guān)注和支持。信的內(nèi)容應(yīng)包括以下要點(diǎn)：
1.寵物過多，噪音擾民； 2. 污染環(huán)境； 3. 不少人尤其孩子曾被驚嚇或咬傷；4. 傳播疾病。
注意：1.詞數(shù)不少于100;
2.信的開頭和署名已為你寫好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。
Dear editor,
Nowadays some people in our city are keeping too many pets, but they don’t care about it enough. So I want to tell you something about the problems caused by it.
                                                                                           
                                                                                                       
                                                                                            
                                                                                              
Yours faithfully,
Zhang Hua

Answer 1

One possible version:
Dear editor,
Nowadays some people in our city are keeping too many pets, but they don’t care about it enough. So I want to tell you something about the problems caused by it.
I consider the problems more and more serious for the following reasons. First of all, as is known to us, pets make too much noise that trouble residents a lot. What’s more, it’s widely accepted that animal wastes pollute the environment, which makes people quite uncomfortale. Many owners like taking their pets to public places where they may frighten children or even sometimes bite people. The most important is that pets can spread some disease and this has attracted much attention.
Taking all these factors into consideration, I sencerely hope that I can get help from you and expect the media to do something for it.
Yours faithfully,
Zhang Hua

試題分析：本文是一封書信應(yīng)用文，向報(bào)社反映目前人們?yōu)E養(yǎng)寵物的問題。問題提示較詳細(xì)，學(xué)生容易把握寫作要求和寫作目的。考生在寫作之前要認(rèn)真審題，根據(jù)提示寫作主要有三段內(nèi)容，第一段已經(jīng)給出，開門見山表明要反映的問題；第二段反映此問題的原因及危害；第三段結(jié)束，提出自己的希望。另外，要注意文章的時態(tài)，用一般現(xiàn)在時。人稱用第三人稱。再有就是不能根據(jù)提示內(nèi)容逐字逐句的翻譯形成漢式的英語，應(yīng)該注意句子的銜接，以提高作文的檔次。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】文章符合書信的寫作要求，要點(diǎn)齊全，表達(dá)思路明確，知識點(diǎn)運(yùn)用恰當(dāng)?shù)轿�，文中使用了非常好的短語和句子為文章增色不少，比如for the following reasons，attracted much attention，和Taking all these factors into consideration, 并用分詞作狀語， 還運(yùn)用了主語從句：it’s widely accepted that……；。The most important is that……，定語從句：as is known to us； which makes people quite uncomfortale；where they may frighten children or even sometimes bite people.等。并注意了句子的銜接如：First of all，What’s more，等。