Question

假如你是李華，你的英國(guó)朋友Jenny最近身體不舒服，來(lái)信向你詢(xún)問(wèn)如何保持健康。
請(qǐng)你給她回信并提出建議。內(nèi)容如下：
注意合理飲食：多吃魚(yú)，豆類(lèi)等有營(yíng)養(yǎng)的食品及新鮮蔬菜和水果，不要吃太多的肉和甜食；
多參加體育鍛煉；
保證充足睡眠，不要熬夜，每天至少睡8個(gè)小時(shí)。
注意：1。詞數(shù)：120左右
2．信的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已給出，但不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。
3．參考詞匯：有營(yíng)養(yǎng)的：nutritious
Dear Jenny
                                                                                             
                                                                                             
                                                                                             
                                                                                             
                                                                                             
                                                                                             
                                                                                             
                                                                                             
                                                                                             
                                                                                             
                                                                                             
Yours
Li Hua

Answer 1

One possible version
Dear Jenny,
How nice to hear from you! In your letter you asked me how to keep healthy. I would like to give you some advice.
As we know, we teenagers grow very fast, so we need plenty of nutritious foods, such as fish, beans,fresh fruit and vegetables. You should not eat too much meat or too many sweets. Also, you should take physical exercise regularly instead of studying all the time. For example, you can play basketball or swim after school. What’s more, having enough sleep is very important. So I advise you to have at least eight hours of sleep every day and not to stay up too late. Only in this way can we keep fit.
Yours
Li Hua

試題分析:提綱作文要求考生根據(jù)所給的寫(xiě)作要求和提綱，確定文章的中心思想，然后緊緊圍繞中心思想展開(kāi)寫(xiě)作。要求考生在保證內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)全部概括的基礎(chǔ)上可以充分發(fā)揮自己的想象，進(jìn)而用自己的語(yǔ)言來(lái)表達(dá)某種觀點(diǎn)或看法，增添了寫(xiě)作的靈活性，同時(shí)能較好地考查考生的想象能力和英語(yǔ)語(yǔ)言表達(dá)能力。寫(xiě)好提綱式作文的關(guān)鍵是認(rèn)真審題和分析所給的提綱，因此考生首先要認(rèn)真閱讀前面的提示，認(rèn)清寫(xiě)作要求和提綱之間的關(guān)系，然后確定文章的主題、文體、人稱(chēng)和時(shí)態(tài)。根據(jù)所給提綱，列出要點(diǎn)，并以此為基礎(chǔ)充分發(fā)揮自己的想象力，靈活運(yùn)用英語(yǔ)知識(shí)，采用不同的表達(dá)方式將各要點(diǎn)完整地表述出來(lái)，注意主次分明，詳略得當(dāng)。語(yǔ)言力求準(zhǔn)確、簡(jiǎn)潔。根據(jù)情景的發(fā)展，按順序安排好材料。同時(shí)應(yīng)選用合適的連接詞或過(guò)渡詞，使文章具有一定的連貫性�？忌�必須認(rèn)真查驗(yàn)是否有漏寫(xiě)情況，有無(wú)拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤及標(biāo)點(diǎn)誤用等。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】文中使用了非常好的短語(yǔ)和句子為文章增色不少，比如hear from, As we know，all the time和Only in this way can we keep fit.，還運(yùn)用了stay up 。并注意了句子句子之間的銜接如用such as , Also, For example , What’s more ，at least等等。
考點(diǎn):提綱類(lèi)作文。