Question

近年來酒后駕車致死案件接連發(fā)生，引發(fā)了社會(huì)高度關(guān)注。請你根據(jù)以下內(nèi)容，以“Treasure Our Lives”為題在你的個(gè)人博客上發(fā)文，奉勸司機(jī)朋友珍愛生命，切莫酒后駕車。

案 例	2011年10月29日，河南一警察酒后駕車發(fā)生事故，導(dǎo)致5死3傷
呼 吁	關(guān)愛生命，社會(huì)和家人；拒絕酒后駕車；自我防范
措 施	提出至少兩項(xiàng)措施。

   參考詞匯：pedestrian  n. 行人         consequence   n.  結(jié)果
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Answer 1

Treasure Our Lives
With the number of private cars increasing rapidly, traffic accidents due to drunk driving occur frequently, leading to tragic consequences. On October 29, 2011, drunk driving in Henan resulted in five deaths and three injuries. These accidents not only cost the lives of many people but also ruined the life of many others. Harmonious society calls on people to treasure their lives as well as that of their family. Drivers must obey the laws and traffic rules, and say "no" to drunk driving. At the same time, severe punishment should be carried out without mercy, and the sale of alcohol should be limited in restaurants. For the sake of safety, pedestrians are never too careful while crossing streets and never run red lights. Only when everybody obeys traffic rules, can we enjoy a happier life.

試題分析：考查提綱類書面表達(dá)：這是一篇提綱類作文，我們需要用正確的英語把給出的要點(diǎn)表達(dá)出來. 動(dòng)筆前，一定要認(rèn)真分析要點(diǎn)，理解要點(diǎn)要表達(dá)的含義，不能遺漏要點(diǎn)，跑題偏題。本作文中給出的要點(diǎn)比較具體,故需要準(zhǔn)確表達(dá).寫作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時(shí)也要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型使文章顯得更有檔次。特別注意在選擇句式時(shí)要賦予變化。平時(shí)除了加強(qiáng)詞匯積累，寫作聯(lián)系以外，還可以適當(dāng)記憶一些類似的范文，這樣在考試中可以起到事半功倍的效果。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】范文出現(xiàn)很多常見的詞組：resulted in導(dǎo)致， obey the laws 遵守法律，F(xiàn)or the sake of為了；還有使用了一些句型：With the number of private cars increasing rapidly, traffic accidents due to drunk driving occur frequently, leading to tragic consequences. 這句話用了with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)和現(xiàn)在分詞做狀語， These accidents not only cost the lives of many people but also ruined the life of many others. Harmonious society calls on people to treasure their lives as well as that of their family.這句話用that指代lives， At the same time, severe punishment should be carried out without mercy, and the sale of alcohol should be limited in restaurants.這句話用了被動(dòng)語態(tài)， pedestrians are never too careful while crossing streets and never run red lights.這句話用了省略句， Only when everybody obeys traffic rules, can we enjoy a happier life.這句話用了倒裝句。