Question

【寫作內(nèi)容】
時(shí)間：上周末
對(duì)象：在中國農(nóng)村教書的志愿者盧安克(Eckart Loewe)
主題：他的志愿者之路
基本情況：1968年出生在德國漢堡(Hamburg)；1990年夏天，短短3個(gè)月的中國之旅，
讓他深深地愛上了廣西的鄉(xiāng)村。
從教過程: （1）1999年，在廣西的一個(gè)鄉(xiāng)村成為一名志愿者教師；
（2）發(fā)現(xiàn)中國家長(zhǎng)特別重視成績(jī)卻忽視孩子的天性和興趣。
教育理念：如果一個(gè)人只是為了別人的理念而生存，他就永遠(yuǎn)找不到自我的方向和力量。
【寫作要求】
只能使用5個(gè)句子表達(dá)全部?jī)?nèi)容；

Answer 1

Last week, I was lucky enough to interview a foreign volunteer teaching in rural China, Eckart Loewe, about his way of volunteering. Eckart Loewe, born in Hamburg, Germany in 1968, began to fall in love with the countryside of Guangxi after a 3-month tour(a 3 months’ tour) in China in the summer of 1990. Ever since 1999, he has been a volunteer teacher in a village there. During the course of teaching in China, he finds that Chinese parents always pay special attention to their children’s grades, but ignore their natures and interests. In his opinion, if a person lives only for others’ ideas, he will never find the direction and power of himself.

【試題分析】本文是篇簡(jiǎn)短的采訪記敘文，內(nèi)容提示很詳細(xì)，按照提示信息，用五句話敘述完整即可。注意文章的時(shí)態(tài)，描述采訪的內(nèi)容用一般過去時(shí)態(tài)，記敘人物的想法等要用現(xiàn)在時(shí)及將來時(shí)。用第三人稱單數(shù)，再有就是不能根據(jù)材料逐字逐句的翻譯應(yīng)該注意句子的銜接，以提高作文的檔次。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】句子結(jié)構(gòu)準(zhǔn)確，信息內(nèi)容完整，篇章結(jié)構(gòu)連貫。知識(shí)點(diǎn)運(yùn)用恰當(dāng)?shù)轿�，文中使用了非常好的短語和句子為文章增色不少，比如fall in love with ，after a 3-month tour ，pay special attention to，ignore their natures and interests等，還運(yùn)用了句型結(jié)構(gòu)，I was lucky enough to interview……，完成時(shí)態(tài)Ever since 1999, he has been a volunteer teacher in a village there.，定語從句So don’t do anything that will make you too excited.及狀語從句if a person lives only for others’ ideas, he will never find the direction and power of himself.
等。并注意了句子的銜接如：in his opinion，等。