Question

剛進(jìn)入高中，一些同學(xué)對(duì)高中生活不太適應(yīng)，為此，你�！坝⒄Z(yǔ)俱樂(lè)部”就“How to enrich our life in the Senior School”展開(kāi)征文比賽。就此話題，你向該社團(tuán)投稿反映你的個(gè)人看法。
1. 廣交朋友。2. 積極參加體育活動(dòng)，強(qiáng)身健體。
3. 努力拼搏，夢(mèng)想進(jìn)入理想大學(xué)。   4. ……
提示：1. 可加入一些細(xì)節(jié)，使文章更加通順合理。
2. 詞數(shù)：100字左右（開(kāi)頭部分不計(jì)）
強(qiáng)身健體: build up one′s  body   
How to enrich our Life in the Senior School
As senior school students, we′r e expected to make our life meaningful and enjoyable.

Answer 1

How to enrich our Life in the Senior School
As senior school students, we’re expected to make our life meaningful and enjoyable. Here are some good tips for you.
Firstly, a life without a friend is a life without a sun, so why not make a lot of good friends and enjoy helping each other. Secondly, in our spare time, we can take an active part in sports so that we can build up our body, which will surely be good to our further study. Besides, it’s our duty to study hard to make sure that one day our dream of entering a key university will come true..
In a word, life in the senior school is colorful and challenging, we should make good use of time to enrich our life.  (101 words)

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