Question

假如你是高二的一名學(xué)生，叫程威，今年有機(jī)會到英國倫敦去學(xué)習(xí)一年。你想了解英國的一些情況，就給在英國的筆友Jack發(fā)了郵件，請他做一下介紹。Jack收到你的郵件后，根據(jù)你所提的問題，給你做了答復(fù)，主要包括：
1. 學(xué)習(xí)上：你所要來的這所中學(xué)是當(dāng)?shù)胤浅Ｓ忻�的，通過和老師、同學(xué)的交流你可以很快提高英語水平；
2. 生活上：可以找一家host family，和他們吃住在一起，這樣可以更好地了解英國人的生活習(xí)慣；
3. 業(yè)余時間：游覽倫敦的名勝，如泰晤士河、倫敦眼等；
4. 不利之處：交通擁擠。
注意：1. 可以適當(dāng)增添內(nèi)容，使行文連貫；
2. 格式、開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)；
3. 詞數(shù)：100左右。
Dear Cheng Wei,
I’m very glad to know that you will get a chance to study in London for a year. I’d like to tell you something about London so that you can have some ideas about it before you come.
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Looking forward to your coming.
Yours Jack

Answer 1

One possible version：
Dear Cheng Wei,
I’m very glad to know that you will get a chance to study in London for a year. I’d like to tell you something about London so that you can have some ideas about it before you come.
London is certainly one of the most famous cities in the world and the school which you are to attend is also well known. I am sure that you will improve your English quickly here by communicating with teachers and students here.
After you come to London, you will live with a host family, which is a good way to help you learn more about the local customs and the English people’s way of life. During your spare time, you can go to visit the places of interest in London, such as Big Ben, the River Thames and the London Eye.
Of course, there are some disadvantages living in London, for example, traveling, at times, can be difficult, particularly by car. Despite these things, I am sure you will have a good time staying and studying in London.
Looking forward to your coming.
Yours,
Jack

試題分析：寫作前要仔細(xì)審題，根據(jù)要求可知這是Jack寫給程威的一封郵件，包括四個方面內(nèi)容，寫作時不要遺漏要點，但同時還要注意要點表述的條理性和層次性。其次要使用一些連接詞以使文章內(nèi)容連貫，上下文銜接自然。此外電子郵件雖然不像書信那么正式，但是要注意語言簡潔自然，主題突出。最后在時態(tài)方面，因為內(nèi)容涉及到將來，所以在介紹情況時可以使用一般現(xiàn)在時和一般將來時態(tài)。
【亮點說明】本文要點全面，語言流暢。作者在信的開頭，開宗明義提出寫信目的的同時也表示了由衷的祝賀與歡迎，語言親切自然。在結(jié)構(gòu)上分段介紹學(xué)校、住宿方面的便利和優(yōu)勢以及一些不便之處，這樣的段落安排使文章結(jié)構(gòu)分明，層次清晰。其次，作者使用了很多涵蓋信息量較大的復(fù)合句，如賓語從句that you will get a chance to study in London for a year，目的狀語從句so that you can have some ideas about it before you come.定語從句 which you are to attend is also well known等。此外，During your spare time 、such as Big Ben、Of course、 for example、 Despite these things等大量短語的出現(xiàn)也使文章內(nèi)容銜接更加自然，語言更加連貫。