Question

假如你是新華中學的學生李華，你的美國朋友Tom一周前給你發(fā)電子郵件，詢問你寒假里的打算，但你因準備期末考試未能及時回復。請根據(jù)以下要點給他回封郵件：
1. 未及時回信的原因；
2. 你假期的打算（如做兼職、補習、旅行、做志愿者等,請列舉至少兩點）
注意：1. 詞數(shù)：100詞左右；
2. 可適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫。
3. 書信格式與開頭均已給出（不計入總詞數(shù)）。

Answer 1

Dear Tom,
　　How are you doing? You asked me in your last letter about my plan for the coming summer vacation. I am sorry that I didn’t reply without delay.
　　How I wish I could read and reply your email as soon as I received it. However, I was busy preparing for my final exam at that time, which is vital for me. As a result, I had no choice but to completely focus on my study. I believe that if you were me, you would make the same choice.
　　By the way, I have a busy schedule for my summer vacation. First and foremost, I would do a part- time job, so that my interpersonal skills would be improved. Additionally, I will take a short trip to Beijing to take a summer course in the New Oriental School. Last but not least, maybe I will work as a volunteer for the school as a teaching assistant.
　　These are my plan for the summer vacation. What’s yours? I am looking forward to your earliest reply.

試題分析：考查的書信。為了考察考生審題能力，命題人并沒有把如“感謝”、“道歉”、“建議”、“申請”等明顯的字眼放在題中，而是通過考察學生對題干的審題能力暗示學生此書信體作文應大體包含道歉和告知兩個方面。因此文章的主干部分要先表示歉意、解釋原因，后寫假期的打算。
從寫作要點和得分點來看，考生應在宏觀上把握書信體寫作的要求，如格式、文體等，寫作段落以三段式為宜，首段體現(xiàn)問候、寫信背景等，尾段再次致歉、也可詢問Tom暑假里的打算，體現(xiàn)書信體的交際性；而中間段具體交待未及時回信的原因、假期的打算�？忌�在微觀層面上應具體把握寫作的內(nèi)容和語言，做到句子之間有效的連接，長短句結(jié)合，多用doing及物做主語，句子加半句原因、結(jié)果、目的等具體細節(jié)的解釋、利用簡單而有效的中文思路擴展英文細節(jié)�？忌�若能在寫作部分做到內(nèi)容充實符合要求、語言精彩與眾不同、結(jié)構(gòu)清晰一目了然。
【亮點說明】文中使用了非常好的短語和句子為文章增色不少，比如as soon as，be busy doing，prepare for，be vital for, by the way. , Last but not least, look forward to；還運用which引導的非限定性定語從句，并注意了句子的銜接如：but，F(xiàn)irst and foremost，so that，Additionally等等。