Question

2013年高考在即，高三學生目前正處在緊張復習迎考的氛圍中。假如你叫李華，承德市某高中的高三學生，寒假之際，想和父母說說知心話，請你用英文在你的博客上給你父母寫一封信。具體內(nèi)容如下：

知心話
感　恩	關切鼓勵，傾注愛心
對父母的期望	1. 多加交流，使自己保持良好狀態(tài)
	2. 創(chuàng)造條件，給自己提供適時幫助
寒假打算	考生自擬(至少寫出三點)

注意：1. 寫作時注意格式；2. 詞數(shù)不少于120；3. 開頭和結尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。
參考詞匯： 高考 college entrance examination
Dear Mom and Dad,
Traditional Chinese Spring Festival is around the corner. On this special occasion, how I wish I could have a heart­to­heart talk with you.
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Yours sincerely,
Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Mom and Dad，
Traditional Chinese Spring Festival is around the corner. On this special occasion, how I wish I could have a heart­to­heart talk with you.
Through those years of my growing up, I always feel grateful to you for your unselfish help, care and love for me. Thanks to your constant encouragement, I have been making tremendous progress in my studies. It will be less than five months before I take the College Entrance Examination, which makes me under great pressure and need frequent support. You know, good studying conditions and timely help will do me a lot of good.
Mom and Dad, my dream is the very one you always have. I am fully aware of the responsibilities I am bearing. I plan to make a detailed study schedule for this coming winter vacation so that I can review lessons and practice solving problems of different subjects. It is also necessary that I do some physical training once in a while so that I can keep fit. If possible, as a family member, I will also help do some housework to make you relax a little bit.
I am quite confident of my future life and I do wish you good health and a happy new year.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua

試題分析：考查提綱式作文：這是一篇高三學生寫給父母的知心話，寫好提綱式作文的關鍵是認真審題和分析所給的提綱，因此考生首先要認真閱讀前面的提示，認清寫作要求和提綱之間的關系，然后確定文章的主題、文體、人稱和時態(tài)。根據(jù)所給提綱，列出要點，并以此為基礎充分發(fā)揮自己的想象力，靈活運用英語知識，采用不同的表達方式將各要點完整地表述出來，注意主次分明，詳略得當。語言力求準確、簡潔。根據(jù)情景的發(fā)展，按順序安排好材料。同時應選用合適的連接詞或過渡詞，使文章具有一定的連貫性�？忌�必須認真查驗是否有漏寫情況，有無拼寫錯誤及標點誤用等
【亮點說明】范文要點全面，句式多變： Thanks to your constant encouragement, I have been making tremendous progress in my studies.這句話用了thanks to多虧了， It will be less than five months before I take the College Entrance Examination, which makes me under great pressure and need frequent support. 這句話用了固定句型It will be +一段時間+before….，和非限制性定語從句， Mom and Dad, my dream is the very one you always have. I am fully aware of the responsibilities I am bearing. 這句話里面都省略關系代詞的定語從句，I plan to make a detailed study schedule for this coming winter vacation so that I can review lessons and practice solving problems of different subjects. 這句話用了so…that…句型，It is also necessary that I do some physical training once in a while so that I can keep fit. 這句話用了it做形式主語，If possible, as a family member, I will also help do some housework to make you relax a little bit.這句話用了省略句， I am quite confident of my future life and I do wish you good health and a happy new year.這句話用了強調(diào)。