Question

假設(shè)你是學(xué)校的學(xué)生會(huì)主席，你校計(jì)劃下周舉行為撫順洪水災(zāi)區(qū)人民獻(xiàn)愛(ài)心捐助活動(dòng)，請(qǐng)你代表學(xué)生會(huì)向同學(xué)們發(fā)出倡議，要點(diǎn)如下：
1. 受災(zāi)嚴(yán)重，急需食品、衣物和藥品等； 2. 號(hào)召學(xué)生捐款捐物， 會(huì)盡快送往災(zāi)區(qū)； 3. 你的看法。
注意：1. 詞數(shù)100左右；
2. 可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；

Answer 1

Teachers and fellow students,
As we all know , a terrible flood broke out in Fushun, Liaoning Province .People have suffered great losses in their lives and properties since then.
It’s reported that many houses were destroyed as a consequence of the flood ,and local people , who are badly in need of food , clothes and medicine , are living a hard life now .Here Students’ Union calls on everyone to give away your old clothes and pocket money generously .All the clothes and the money to be collected will be sent to the flood –stricken areas as soon as possible.
My fellow friends , “blood is thicker than water”.The flood made all our hearts links together .please hold out your hands and donate your love without hesitation.We believe miracles can be created and a great many lives will be saved .
That’s all .Thank you.

試題分析：本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)是一份倡議書(shū)。倡議書(shū)在結(jié)構(gòu)安排上要首先講明發(fā)生的事件，事件的進(jìn)展和當(dāng)前的現(xiàn)狀。然后就此發(fā)出倡議，提出要求。其次在語(yǔ)言方面要真誠(chéng)感人，要適當(dāng)使用祈使句來(lái)增強(qiáng)號(hào)召力。而在時(shí)態(tài)方面則要根據(jù)需要選擇一般過(guò)去時(shí)、現(xiàn)在進(jìn)行時(shí)、一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)或者將來(lái)時(shí)態(tài)。比如敘述事件部分就要使用一般過(guò)去時(shí)。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本篇范文結(jié)構(gòu)安排合理，是一篇很具有號(hào)召力的倡議書(shū)。作者使用的祈使句.please hold out your hands and donate your love without hesitation、諺語(yǔ)blood is thicker than water 和被動(dòng)句We believe miracles can be created and a great many lives will be saved .很好地激發(fā)了人們的情感，引起人內(nèi)心的共鳴，增強(qiáng)了人們戰(zhàn)勝困難的決心。此外句式的多變，長(zhǎng)短句的結(jié)合，也是本文的一大亮點(diǎn)。