Question

英國有句諺語：結(jié)識(shí)新朋友，不忘老朋友，老朋友是金，新朋友是銀。中國自古亦有朋自遠(yuǎn)方來，不亦樂乎？”等描繪朋友之間友情的名句。初中的學(xué)習(xí)生活即將結(jié)束了，在這段時(shí)間里你一定結(jié)識(shí)了許多朋友，并產(chǎn)生了深厚的友誼。請(qǐng)以My Best Friend為標(biāo)題寫一篇短文。
注意：
1．詞數(shù)90左右。短文的內(nèi)容應(yīng)包含所提示的要點(diǎn)。
2．語言要流暢�？蓢�繞提示要點(diǎn)適當(dāng)增加情節(jié)，以使短文的意思連貫。
3．短文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的姓名、校名及地名。
My Best Friend
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Answer 1

My Best Friend
A life without friends is like a life without the sun. I have many friends. Among them Ann is my best friend.
Ann is kind and honest. We play and study together every day. When I am in trouble, she gives me a hand; when I am upset, she gives me comfort and encouragement. She shares not only happiness but also sadness with me. With her help, I am able to grow healthily. Thanks to her, I have made great progress in many ways. However, our school life is over soon. I will miss her.
As the saying goes, “Make new friends，but keep the old ones.” I think a true friend plays an important role in our life.

試題分析：這是一篇提綱作文。本文要求按照所給的題目結(jié)合提示內(nèi)容完成這篇作文，我們要用恰當(dāng)?shù)恼Z言把所列舉的內(nèi)容準(zhǔn)確地表達(dá)出來。寫作中要介紹自己的好友給自己的幫助、對(duì)自己的生活產(chǎn)生的影響等進(jìn)行陳述，表達(dá)出自己對(duì)朋友的看法等。根據(jù)材料內(nèi)容可知本文主要是一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)，人稱主要是第一、三人稱，注意并列連詞的使用及主謂一致問題。寫作中注意上下文的過度，符合邏輯關(guān)系。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】
這篇短文簡明、扼要地介紹了自己的一個(gè)好友，并包含了文中所要求的全部信息。其中使用了一些固定句式和短語，其中英語諺語的準(zhǔn)確使用為文章增色不少.如gives me a hand，shares not only happiness but also sadness with me，With her help，A life without friends is like a life without the sun，Make new friends，but keep the old ones，學(xué)習(xí)中再注意總結(jié),牢記一些固定句式及短語,寫作時(shí)就可以適當(dāng)引用,使文章的表達(dá)更有邏輯性,更富有條理。