Question

假如你叫李華，是初三（2）班的一名學(xué)生，你所在學(xué)校的 “愛(ài)心俱樂(lè)部 (Helping Hands Club)” 將吸收新的成員。你想加入該俱樂(lè)部，請(qǐng)你根據(jù)你自己的擅長(zhǎng)，平時(shí)的愛(ài)心表現(xiàn)以及參加愛(ài)心俱樂(lè)部的目的寫(xiě)一封自薦信。收信人是高先生.(15分)
詞語(yǔ)：name, student, Class 2, Grade 3, member, hard, be good at,
get along with, join

Answer 1

Dear Mr. Gao,
My name is Li Hua. I’m a student from Class 2, Grade 3. I’d like to be a member of the Helping Hands Club. As a student, I work hard at my lessons. I am good at English and do well in both speaking and listening. Besides, I am easy to get along with and enjoy helping others. On my way home I often help the people who are in trouble. When I see old people or children cross the street, I usually help them. If I join the club, I will do more for others. I’ll be glad if I am received. I am looking forwards to getting your reply.
Yours,
Li Hua

試題分析：這是一篇提綱作文。本文要求按照題目要求完成這篇自薦信的寫(xiě)作，我們要用恰當(dāng)?shù)恼Z(yǔ)言把所列舉的內(nèi)容準(zhǔn)確地表達(dá)出來(lái)。寫(xiě)作中要包含個(gè)人的基本信息，自己的擅長(zhǎng)，平時(shí)的愛(ài)心表現(xiàn)以及參加愛(ài)心俱樂(lè)部的目的等幾個(gè)方面進(jìn)行陳述，表達(dá)出自己想入會(huì)的愿望等。根據(jù)材料內(nèi)容可知本文主要是一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)，人稱(chēng)主要是第一人稱(chēng)，注意并列連詞的使用及主謂一致問(wèn)題。寫(xiě)作中注意上下文的過(guò)度，符合邏輯關(guān)系。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這篇短文簡(jiǎn)明、扼要地闡明了自己的基本情況，并包含了文中所要求的個(gè)人全部信息，包括愛(ài)好、特長(zhǎng)平時(shí)的愛(ài)心表現(xiàn)和入會(huì)目的等都有所交代。其中使用了一些固定句式和短語(yǔ)，包含狀語(yǔ)從句的準(zhǔn)確使用可圈可點(diǎn).如 am good at English and do well in both speaking and listening.，When I see old people or children cross the street，I’ll be glad if I am received.，學(xué)習(xí)中再注意總結(jié),牢記一些固定句式及短語(yǔ),寫(xiě)作時(shí)就可以適當(dāng)引用,使文章的表達(dá)更有邏輯性,更富有條理。