Question

假如你是張勝，在暑假里和父母一起到北京，請(qǐng)根據(jù)下面的行程給你的筆友埃里克（Eric）寫(xiě)一封郵件，向他介紹你的北京之旅以及你的感受。
行程：第一天：天安門(mén)廣場(chǎng)（Tian’anmen Square）;故宮（the Forbidden City）
第二天：頤和園（the Summer palace） 第三天：長(zhǎng)城（the Great WALL）
要求：1。詞數(shù)70詞左右（開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)）；
2.語(yǔ)句通順，結(jié)構(gòu)完整。
Dear Eric,
I went to Beijing with my parents last week and we had a good time there.
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When you are free, welcome to China and we can visit these great places together.
Yours,          
Zhang Sheng

Answer 1

We first went to the heart of China-Tian’anmen Square.It is one of the largest squares in the world. On one side of the square is the Great Hall of the People and on the other side is the Museum of Chinese History. A lot of people from all over the world come to visit the square every day.Then we went to the Forbidden City,I thought that was really beautiful The Palace Museum has 9999 palaces. It has a very long history. I bought a lot of souvenirs of the Palace Museum. What nice palaces these are!
Next day we visited the Palace Museum and felt excited. If you want to know more about the Palace Museum, you can go to Beijing and have a look.On the third day ,we visited the Great Wall. It is very long and old.. It has millions of bricks. Each brick is very big and heavy. Lots of people from different countries like climbing the Great Wall. We felt very tired when we climbed to the top of the Great Wall.but I was happybecause I know the chinese saying：One who fails to reach the Great Wall is not a hero！

試題分析：這是一篇給材料作文。本文是一篇描述假期旅游的文章，所以主要時(shí)態(tài)是過(guò)去時(shí)態(tài)。當(dāng)在描寫(xiě)景點(diǎn)時(shí)，可以根據(jù)需要用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。人稱主要是采用第一人稱復(fù)數(shù)。在寫(xiě)作時(shí)注意把景點(diǎn)描述全，同時(shí)適當(dāng)發(fā)揮補(bǔ)充一些相關(guān)內(nèi)容，是文章飽滿，豐富。注意上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這篇短文所給材料直接，不易發(fā)揮。但作者詳細(xì)的描述了各景點(diǎn)的特色，可見(jiàn)英語(yǔ)基礎(chǔ)的扎實(shí)。同時(shí)引用諺語(yǔ)One who fails to reach the Great Wall is not a hero！不到長(zhǎng)城非好漢。更給文章增色不少。為了寫(xiě)好文章，平時(shí)就要多積累一些詞匯，名言等。