Question

在日常生活中，你看到身邊有哪些不良現(xiàn)象？請(qǐng)列舉一些并就某些方面說(shuō)說(shuō)你的做法和想法。
提示：speak loudly, cut in line(插隊(duì)), waste food, unfriendly(冷漠的), offer no help…
要求：1. 參考提示語(yǔ)，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；
2. 語(yǔ)句通順，意思連貫，書(shū)寫(xiě)工整。
3. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和地名；
4. 詞數(shù)：不少于80詞。（開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已給出，但不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)）
In our daily life, I usually see some bad behavior around us. For example,                 
                                                                             
                                                                            
I think if everyone can think more of others, we’ll have a better living environment.

Answer 1

One possible version：
In our daily life, I usually see some bad behavior around us. For example, I often hear people speak and laugh loudly in public. It is too noisy. Some people cut in line while others are waiting. It makes me unhappy. And in our school dining hall, I often see students waste food. At times, people seem unfriendly and offer no help when others are in trouble. For me, my parents are strict with me. They often tell me to behave well. So I never drop litter about. And I never draw on the desk or on the wall. I am polite to old people.
I think if everyone can think more of others, we’ll have a better living environment.

試題分析：這是一篇給材料作文，介紹自己身邊的不良現(xiàn)象以及自己的想法和做法。結(jié)合所給材料，可知本文主要考查一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)，人稱為第一，三人稱，注意主謂一致問(wèn)題，句子結(jié)構(gòu)主要為系表結(jié)構(gòu)，注意一些常見(jiàn)句式的應(yīng)用，比如：I often hear people......;Some people......;people seem unfriendly......;So I never ......等句式的應(yīng)用。寫(xiě)作中注意運(yùn)用代詞，注意多種句式交替運(yùn)用。寫(xiě)作中注意敘述順序，符合邏輯關(guān)系，注意使用所提示的短語(yǔ)。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)練。開(kāi)頭介紹了自己身邊有一些不良現(xiàn)象，接下來(lái)介紹自己的做法，最后說(shuō)出自己的想法，每個(gè)人要多為他人著想。此處用了speak and laugh loudly ，cut in line ， waste food，offer no help，are strict with， am polite to等這些詞組的運(yùn)用也讓文章增色不少。