Question

當(dāng)今社會(huì)，浪費(fèi)和奢侈消費(fèi)變得越來越嚴(yán)重，為創(chuàng)建文明城，珠海市啟動(dòng)了“節(jié)儉生活，從我做起”行動(dòng)，請(qǐng)你寫一篇以 “Saving”為題的80字以上的短文。
內(nèi)容包括：
1、你對(duì)節(jié)儉的看法。
2、在生活中你看到了哪些不節(jié)儉的行為。（至少兩件）
3、列舉兩件以上你在生活中做過的有關(guān)節(jié)儉的事。
4、號(hào)召大家參與到節(jié)儉活動(dòng)中來。
Saving
Zhuhai government has called on the citizens to do something for saving so that we can enjoy our happy life. We middle school students should do something for it. In my opinion I think     
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Answer 1

In my opinion, I think saving is our Chinese traditional ethic which we should develop. Saving is good for us to solve the problem of energy shortage. And it can make us support ourselves and learn to arrange our lives.
In our daily life, we can see different kinds of wasting. For example, some students waste food in school canteen. Some students often forget to turn off the electricity when they leave the classroom. Others even don’t turn off the tap after washing their hands.
As for me, I am trying my best to keep saving. When I go shopping, I use cloth bags instead of plastic bags. And I go to school on foot or ride bikes instead of taking my parents’ car. Besides, I save water and food in my everyday life, and try to recycle the energy.
In a word, saving is very necessary and important. We should keep saving as possible as we can. I hope there will be more and more Zhuhai citizens to keep saving from every little thing. On the other hand, we should fight against the phenomenon of wasting and build an energy-saving society.

試題分析：這是一篇提綱作文，所給提綱要點(diǎn)清晰，要求明確，話題內(nèi)容貼近學(xué)生生活實(shí)際，考生有較大的發(fā)揮空間。動(dòng)筆前要認(rèn)真審題，勾勒要點(diǎn)，并適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。行文中要注意人稱、時(shí)態(tài)的變化及主謂一致問題。同時(shí)注意上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】這篇短文涵蓋了題目要求的所有要點(diǎn)內(nèi)容，表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確，意思連貫，符合邏輯。在文章的結(jié)構(gòu)組織上很好地使用了簡(jiǎn)單句和復(fù)合句，使文章自然流暢。同時(shí)，使用了大量的固定句式和短語(yǔ)，如：In my opinion、be good for sb to do sth、make sb do sth、for example、forget to do sth、turn off、as for、try one’s best to do sth、instead of、in a word、as possible as we can、more and more、On the other hand、fight against等，這為文章增色不少。學(xué)習(xí)中注意積累，牢記一些常用句式及短語(yǔ)，寫作時(shí)就可以適當(dāng)引用，使文章的表達(dá)更有邏輯性，更富有條理。