Question

假如你叫李華，是某校高三學(xué)生。高考在即，看到每天家人和學(xué)校為自己做的一切，深有感觸。請(qǐng)根據(jù)下表提示寫(xiě)一篇短文。

家長(zhǎng)	生活上的照顧
學(xué)校	提供了方便（延長(zhǎng)圖書(shū)館和教室的開(kāi)放時(shí)間……）
老師	學(xué)習(xí)上給予的幫助（鼓勵(lì)，答疑解難……）
你自己	感受和打算，至少兩點(diǎn)

   注意：
1．必須包括主要內(nèi)容，可以適當(dāng)增減細(xì)節(jié)，使內(nèi)容連貫、完整；
2．詞數(shù)：120詞左右；
3．開(kāi)頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)內(nèi)。
I’m a senior 3 student.The college entrance exam is on the way                              
                                                                                      
                                                                                       

Answer 1

I’m a senior 3 student. The college entrance exam is on the way and everyone around us is trying their best to help us in different ways. At school, all the teachers work very hard, encouraging us to build up our confidence and inspiring us to improve our study. Whenever we meet with difficulties, they are ready to come to our help. Meanwhile, our school also provides good facilities for us students, for example the library stays open in the evenings and even on the weekends. At home, our parents take good care of us and make sure we are well fed so that we can always be full of energy.
I’m very grateful for the efforts of our parents and teachers. I’m determined to try my best to prepare for the exam. I am sure that with their encouragement and timely help I’ll be able to achieve my goal and be a useful person of our society in the near future.

試題分析：本題是提綱類(lèi)作文寫(xiě)作，文章題材和體裁已經(jīng)給出，無(wú)需考生過(guò)多考慮。而考生重點(diǎn)要注意審題，只有做好了審題環(huán)節(jié)才能保證寫(xiě)作的有效性和目的性。審題主要要做到以下幾點(diǎn)：①分清層次和段落，切勿平鋪直敘，“一逗到底”。②句式﹑詞匯要盡量多樣，恰當(dāng)使用較復(fù)雜的句式結(jié)構(gòu)和較高級(jí)的詞匯。③文章銜接緊密，過(guò)渡自然，恰當(dāng)使用好連接詞或過(guò)渡性詞匯。④注意書(shū)寫(xiě)的整齊、美觀，并正確使用標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這篇范文使用了高中教材中出現(xiàn)的詞匯，短語(yǔ)，語(yǔ)法，句式，如：At school, all the teachers work very hard, encouraging us to build up our confidence and inspiring us to improve our study.這句話用了現(xiàn)在分詞做狀語(yǔ)， Whenever we meet with difficulties, they are ready to come to our help. 這句話用了讓步狀語(yǔ)從句， our school also provides good facilities for us students, for example the library stays open in the evenings and even on the weekends. 這句話用了provide sth for sb“提供某人某物”，At home, our parents take good care of us and make sure we are well fed so that we can always be full of energy.這句話用了so that…引導(dǎo)的目的狀語(yǔ)從句， I’m very grateful for the efforts of our parents and teachers. I’m determined to try my best to prepare for the exam. 這兩句話都用了不定式，還有范文中還有Meanwhile,這樣的關(guān)聯(lián)詞使文章更加連貫。