Question

閱讀下面的短，然后按要求寫一篇150字左右的英語短文。

[寫作內(nèi)容］
1.以約30個詞概括上文的主要內(nèi)容。
2.以約120個詞談?wù)勀銓Α白孕拧钡目捶�，�?nèi)容包括：
（1)鷹成雞的原因。
（2）這則故事的啟示．
[寫作要求］
1.可以參加閱讀材料的內(nèi)容，但.不得直接引用原文中的句子。
2.作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實姓名和學(xué)校名稱。
［評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)］
　　概括準(zhǔn)確　語言規(guī)范　內(nèi)容合適　語篇連貫

Answer 1

Hatched by a hen, an eagle lived like a chicken. He wanted to fly like an eagle but discouraged by his fellows. Eventually he died bitterly without knowing he himself was an eagle. (33 words)
Some factors may account for why the eagle was made a chicken. Firstly, the eagle was influenced by the chickens around him, scratching for food just like them without a higher goal. Secondly, the eagle failed to reflect on himself, so he didn’t know he had the potential to fly high. Finally, he lacked enough self-confidence, so he gave up his dream of flying like an eagle, just because of the discouraging words from others.
There are many such eagles in our daily life. I think we should avoid negative influences, set a high goal and work hard to achieve it. Besides, we must be confident in our potential and make good use of it to become real eagles.

試題分析：本文屬于讀寫任務(wù)寫作，動筆前，一定要認(rèn)真閱讀原文，并理解內(nèi)容。認(rèn)真看清題目要求，這篇書面表達(dá)給了一段材料：先要求以約30個詞概括上文的主要內(nèi)容，要求有很高的概括提煉的能力，要抓住文章的主題，再以約120個詞寫一篇短文，按照要點去表達(dá)，不能有遺漏，寫作時注意準(zhǔn)確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系。寫作時盡量使用自己會的單詞、詞組和句型，同時也要注意使用一些高級語法和句型，使自己的文章更有文采。
【亮點說明】范文觀點明確，有理有據(jù)，不乏好的短語和句子：account for是…原因， reflect on反思， gave up 放棄，because of 因為，set a high goal設(shè)立很高的目標(biāo)， be confident in對…自信， make good use of 充分利用，Hatched by a hen, an eagle lived like a chicken. 這句話用了過去分詞做狀語， the eagle was influenced by the chickens around him, scratching for food just like them without a higher goal. 這句話用了現(xiàn)在分詞做狀語， 還有范文還使用了Firstly, Secondly,  Finally, Besides,這樣的關(guān)聯(lián)詞使文章更加連貫。