Question

最近中國(guó)多個(gè)地區(qū)出現(xiàn)霧霾天氣，某中學(xué)高三（3）班就此話題組織了一次班會(huì)活動(dòng)，假設(shè)你是該班的通訊員，請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下信息寫(xiě)一篇英文報(bào)道給學(xué)�？�物。

時(shí)間：2014.1.5下午第三節(jié)	地點(diǎn)：學(xué)校會(huì)議室	主持人：班長(zhǎng)王濤
參與者：高三（3）班師生	主題：還我藍(lán)天白云
活動(dòng)目的	認(rèn)識(shí)日益嚴(yán)峻的空氣污染問(wèn)題，增強(qiáng)環(huán)保意識(shí)。
活動(dòng)流程	1. 利用PPT展示圖片及調(diào)查結(jié)果：空氣污染致我國(guó)每年約25萬(wàn)人過(guò)早死亡，數(shù)萬(wàn)兒童健康受危害； 2. 小組討論：如何應(yīng)對(duì)霧霾天氣； 3. 班主任點(diǎn)評(píng)。
活動(dòng)小結(jié)	……

【寫(xiě)作要求】
只能用5個(gè)句子表達(dá)全部?jī)?nèi)容。文章開(kāi)頭已給出，不計(jì)入總句數(shù)。
【評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)】
句子結(jié)構(gòu)準(zhǔn)確，信息內(nèi)容完整，篇章連貫。
As the atmospheric pollution worsens and the air quality declines, smog has occurred in many parts of China.      
                                                                                           
                                                                                            
                                                                                           
                                                                                           
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Answer 1

As the atmospheric pollution worsens and the air quality declines, smog has occurred in many parts of China. With the theme of “Bring back a blue sky and white clouds”, a class meeting hosted by our monitor Wang Tao was held in the Meeting Hall among all the teachers and students of Class 3, Senior3 during the 2nd section class on the afternoon of Jan. 5, 2014. The activity aimed to get the students informed of the fact of the increasingly serious hazy weather and raise our awareness of environmental protection.
In the class meeting, the PPT was used to present some pictures and related survey results, which show that air pollution in China causes about 250,000 early deaths per year and tens of thousands of children’ s health may get threatened. Then, we discussed in groups about how to deal with air pollution and then, our head teacher gave some comments.
It is the meeting that makes us aware of the importance of clean air and determine to help fight against air pollution.

試題分析：寫(xiě)好提綱式作文的關(guān)鍵是認(rèn)真審題和分析所給的提綱，因此考生首先要認(rèn)真閱讀前面的提示，認(rèn)清寫(xiě)作要求和提綱之間的關(guān)系，然后確定文章的主題、文體、人稱和時(shí)態(tài)。根據(jù)所給提綱，列出要點(diǎn)，并以此為基礎(chǔ)充分發(fā)揮自己的想象力，靈活運(yùn)用英語(yǔ)知識(shí)，采用不同的表達(dá)方式將各要點(diǎn)完整地表述出來(lái)，注意主次分明，詳略得當(dāng)。語(yǔ)言力求準(zhǔn)確、簡(jiǎn)潔。根據(jù)情景的發(fā)展，按順序安排好材料。同時(shí)應(yīng)選用合適的連接詞或過(guò)渡詞，使文章具有一定的連貫性�？忌�必須認(rèn)真查驗(yàn)是否有漏寫(xiě)情況，有無(wú)拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤及標(biāo)點(diǎn)誤用等。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】范文很好的表達(dá)了要點(diǎn)的內(nèi)容，使用了一些很好的詞組和句型： aimed to 旨在.. ，get sb. informed of“讓某人熟悉”deal with“處理”， In the class meeting, the PPT was used to present some pictures and related survey results, which show that air pollution in China causes about 250,000 early deaths per year and tens of thousands of children’ s health may get threatened. 這句話用了非限制性定語(yǔ)從句，It is the meeting that makes us aware of the importance of clean air and determine to help fight against air pollution. 這句話用了強(qiáng)調(diào)句。