Question

假設(shè)你是李華，你上周從某一網(wǎng)店上購(gòu)買(mǎi)了一部手機(jī)，使用五天后發(fā)現(xiàn)開(kāi)機(jī)有困難，屏幕顯示也有問(wèn)題。請(qǐng)你給那家網(wǎng)店寫(xiě)一封投訴信，反映你的問(wèn)題與要求。
注意：
1．詞數(shù)100左右。2. 可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。
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Answer 1

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Dear Sir,
The cell phone that I ordered from your store arrived on time, but only five days later I found it could not work properly.
On Saturday morning I tried to turn on the cell phone as usual but failed. I managed to turn it on after trying it for fifteen minutes. When it was turned on, all I could see on the screen were just some lines! Then I dialed your service number several times, but the line was always busy.
I have to use a cell phone in my job almost all the time. This problem has seriously affected my job and life. Can you get it repaired as soon as possible or have it replaced with a new one? I sincerely hope that you will look into this matter immediately and deal with it quickly and properly.
An early response would be appreciated.
Yours faithfully,
Li Hua

試題分析：所選內(nèi)容與我們的生活相關(guān)，又是考生比較熟悉的書(shū)信格式，考生只要把所給要點(diǎn)逐條陳述，適度發(fā)揮，不要逐句翻譯，注意使用一些過(guò)渡句或過(guò)渡詞來(lái)使句子讀起來(lái)流暢。但是要注意使用正確的時(shí)態(tài)，因?yàn)檫@封信是給出對(duì)方投訴意見(jiàn)，還要注意寫(xiě)作時(shí)的語(yǔ)氣要客氣。
點(diǎn)評(píng)：考生在寫(xiě)作時(shí)，可以在作文中穿插使用一些過(guò)渡性詞語(yǔ)。這樣會(huì)使作文條理清楚，連貫自然，行文緊湊。應(yīng)該注意適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)以使行文連貫，比如適當(dāng)選用表示因果、遞進(jìn)、轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系的連接詞，使文章流暢、通順，并避免因反復(fù)使用句式相同的簡(jiǎn)單句而造成的單調(diào)感。