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當(dāng)今許多家長(zhǎng)不僅要求孩子刻苦學(xué)習(xí)功課，而且還要求他們學(xué)習(xí)諸如音樂(lè)、舞蹈、書(shū)法、美術(shù)、棋類(lèi)等各種特長(zhǎng)，希望孩子未來(lái)能更成功。對(duì)此現(xiàn)象的利弊、得失眾說(shuō)紛紜。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)下面提示要點(diǎn)寫(xiě)一篇短文并闡述自己的觀點(diǎn)。
益處：發(fā)展多種技能,培養(yǎng)多種愛(ài)好, 豐富生活；開(kāi)闊視野，完善自我；增加就業(yè)機(jī)會(huì)
弊端：孩子自我支配時(shí)間少； 壓力更大； 加重家庭經(jīng)濟(jì)負(fù)擔(dān)等
你的觀點(diǎn)： ……
注意：
1.詞數(shù)120左右；短文的開(kāi)頭已經(jīng)給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。
2.參考詞匯： horizon視野
Many parents are trying to find tutors to teach their children special skills such as music, dancing, calligraphy, painting, chess and so on, 
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Answer 1

One possible version
Many parents are trying to find tutors to teach their children special skills such as music, dancing, calligraphy, painting, chess and so on, hoping they’ll become more successful in the future.
Learning special skills can help children develop both different skills and many interests，which can enrich their lives. Meanwhile, they can broaden their horizons and improve themselves. Besides, they will be more likely to get good jobs in the future.
However, life is hard for these children, who have to spend much time practicing the skills. They hardly have their own time to do what they want. Also, they have to suffer more pressure.  What’s worse , their families have to pay more money for their learning.
Different children have different interests and they do need time to relax. So I think parents should let children do what they’re interested in. Only in this way can they enjoy a happy life.

試題分析：本文屬于說(shuō)明利弊題型，這種題型往往要求先說(shuō)明一下現(xiàn)狀，再對(duì)比事物本身的利弊，有時(shí)也會(huì)單從一個(gè)角度（利或弊）出發(fā)，最后往往要求考生表明自己的態(tài)度（或?qū)κ挛锴熬疤岢鲱A(yù)測(cè)）。就本文而言，要求根據(jù)提示就家長(zhǎng)對(duì)孩子從小的過(guò)度要求，害怕孩子輸在起跑線上這一現(xiàn)象寫(xiě)出益處、弊端以及自己的個(gè)人觀點(diǎn)，所以在謀篇布局上可以用三個(gè)段落來(lái)分別講述這三方面內(nèi)容；此外，作文提示的益處和弊端涉及的內(nèi)容較多，為了避免內(nèi)容混亂應(yīng)當(dāng)在論述時(shí)恰當(dāng)使用表示順序的詞匯，比如first; second; at last ；one the one hand , one the other hand ; for one thing ; for another thing 等。在時(shí)態(tài)方面，因?yàn)檫@是一篇論述社會(huì)現(xiàn)象的文章，可以使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。最后，在語(yǔ)言方面還要注意高級(jí)詞匯和句式的多變，以提高文章檔次。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】在范文開(kāi)頭作者提出家長(zhǎng)對(duì)孩子們過(guò)度要求這一社會(huì)現(xiàn)象以及家長(zhǎng)們的期望，然后在第二段從三個(gè)方面講述了孩子多學(xué)習(xí)技藝的好處，作者在此段運(yùn)用了meanwhile 和besides兩個(gè)表示層近關(guān)系的副詞，使得本段內(nèi)容層次非常清晰。在第三段段首作者首先使用however一詞引出了這一現(xiàn)象背后存在的弊端，有效地做到了內(nèi)容上的過(guò)渡，而且在表述時(shí)也用到了使文章具有層次感的also, What’s worse 等詞匯。最后作者用Different children have different interests and they do need time to relax.作為過(guò)渡，提出了自己的觀點(diǎn)。這種段落以及層次的安排，不僅使文章結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，上下銜接自然，也顯示了作者思路的清晰和對(duì)詞匯的準(zhǔn)確把握。在句式方面，作者用到了倒裝句Only in this way can they enjoy a happy life.，賓語(yǔ)從句I think parents should let children do what they’re interested in.和定語(yǔ)從句life is hard for these children, who have to spend much time practicing the skills.等豐富了文章的句式，成為了文章的一個(gè)個(gè)亮點(diǎn)。