Question

假設(shè)你叫張濤，你在北京的筆友李華生日即將到來(lái)。請(qǐng)你給他寫(xiě)一封電子郵件，表示祝賀。郵件要包括以下要點(diǎn)：1.祝他生日晚會(huì)上玩得愉快； 2. 介紹你班上周日的爬山活動(dòng)，并附幾張照片； 3. 詢(xún)問(wèn)李華的學(xué)習(xí)情況。
注意：1.內(nèi)容包括所有要點(diǎn)，但不要逐條翻譯；  2.可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，但行文連貫；3. 詞數(shù)100左右；開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

Answer 1

Dear Li Hua,
Happy birthday ! I hope you’ll have a great birthday party and wish you all the best.
Last Sunday my class went to climb a mountain in the suburbs, where we had a wonderful time and enjoyed a relaxing spring day, It was like a rest from our busy school life. And it was a really unforgettable trip. Some photos taken that day will be attached to this email and please share my happiness.
How are things going with you, Li Hua? You have just started your school life in Senior 3. I think your school life is quite busy. Do you have so much pressure? I am  willing to offer you any help at any time if you need.
Please keep in close contact with me .
Yours,
Zhang Tao

試題分析：本文是一篇書(shū)信，實(shí)際上就是寫(xiě)一封信。也是材料作文，你在北京的筆友李華生日即將到來(lái)。請(qǐng)你給他寫(xiě)一封電子郵件，表示祝賀，要點(diǎn)都給出了，要表達(dá)清楚全面，本作文中給出的要點(diǎn)比較簡(jiǎn)略,故需要充實(shí)文章內(nèi)容，需要注意不要偏離文章中心。寫(xiě)作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式。還要用適當(dāng)?shù)年P(guān)聯(lián)詞把句子串聯(lián)起來(lái)，使文章更加連貫。平時(shí)除了加強(qiáng)詞匯積累，寫(xiě)作聯(lián)系以外，還可以適當(dāng)記憶一些類(lèi)似的范文，這樣在考試中可以起到事半功倍的效果。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】 因?yàn)槭菚?shū)信，這篇范文寫(xiě)的比較簡(jiǎn)潔，但是句式還是富有變化的，如：Last Sunday my class went to climb a mountain in the suburbs, where we had a wonderful time and enjoyed a relaxing spring day,這句話用了定語(yǔ)從句Some photos taken that day will be attached to this email and please share my happiness. 這句話用了過(guò)去分詞做定語(yǔ)，和be attached to這個(gè)詞組， I am  willing to offer you any help at any time if you need. 這句話用了詞組be willing to do和at any time。