Question

作文：最近,你校同學(xué)正在參加某英文報(bào)組織的一場(chǎng)討論.討論的主題是:公園要不要收門(mén)票?請(qǐng)你根據(jù)下表所提供的信息,給報(bào)社寫(xiě)一封信,客觀地介紹討論情況.

60%的同學(xué)認(rèn)為	40%的同學(xué)認(rèn)為
1.不應(yīng)收門(mén)票	1.應(yīng)收門(mén)票，但票價(jià)不宜高
2.公園是公眾休閑的地方	2.支付園林工人工資
3.如收票,需建大門(mén),圍墻,會(huì)影響城市形象	3.購(gòu)新花木

注意: 1. 信的開(kāi)頭已為你寫(xiě)好.
2. 詞數(shù): 100 左右.
3. 參考詞匯: 門(mén)票--- entrance fees

Answer 1

Dear editor,
I'm writing to tell you about the discussion we've had about whether an entrance fee should be charged for parks.
Opinions are divided on the question. 60％ of the students are against the idea of entrance fees. They believe a public park should be free of charge. People need a place where they can rest and enjoy themselves. Charging entrance fees will no doubt keep some people away. What is more, it will become necessary to build gates and walls, which will do harm to the appearance of a city.
On the other hand, 40％ think that fees should be charged because you need money to pay gardeners and other workers, and to buy plants and young trees. They suggest, however, fees should be charged low.
Yours truly
Li Hua

試題分析：作文以英文報(bào)組織的一場(chǎng)討論，圍繞公園要不要收票進(jìn)行闡述，有不同的觀點(diǎn)，認(rèn)真審題，知道要點(diǎn)內(nèi)容，注意分段，第一段是話題，第二段是贊成的觀點(diǎn)，第三段的反對(duì)的觀點(diǎn)，把要點(diǎn)加以整理，用適當(dāng)?shù)木湫瓦M(jìn)行概括；概括時(shí)可以主要用簡(jiǎn)單句，也可以適當(dāng)用復(fù)雜句，但要確保復(fù)雜句使用正確；切記要點(diǎn)要全，不要遺漏；注意語(yǔ)法正確，單詞拼寫(xiě)正確，字體干凈。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】文章的結(jié)構(gòu)符合正反方的觀點(diǎn)的框架，語(yǔ)言既簡(jiǎn)練，有不乏好的短語(yǔ)和句子：free of charge 免費(fèi)，no doubt毫無(wú)疑問(wèn)，keep … away遠(yuǎn)離，定語(yǔ)從句 People need a place where they can rest and enjoy themselves.和非限制性定語(yǔ)從句： it will become necessary to build gates and walls, which will do harm to the appearance of a city.虛擬語(yǔ)氣：They suggest, however, fees should be charged low. 還有文章還用了On the other hand,What is more,這些關(guān)聯(lián)的詞使文章更加連貫。