Question

請你以一則公益廣告——Don’t let the keyboard separate you and your loved ones為題寫一篇發(fā)言稿，談談網(wǎng)絡給我們帶來的好處，并呼吁人們放下手中的鼠標與家人多多溝通，享受與家人在一起的美好時光。
參考詞匯：網(wǎng)民—netizen
注意：1．詞數(shù)：120左右；
2．題目與開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)
3．可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
4．短文中不能出現(xiàn)與本人相關的信息。
Don’t let the keyboard separate you and your loved ones
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Answer 1

Hello, everyone! Today the number of the netizens in our country has increased rapidly, yet many of them do not pay enough attention to the family. There’s no doubt that we benefit much from the Internet. For example, it’s convenient for us to get the information we need and communicate with our friends and relatives. Meanwhile, it can help us learn what is happening both at home and abroad. However, no matter how attractive the Internet is, we shouldn’t be separated from our loved ones. Therefore, just for a moment, we should stop surfing the Internet and spend time with our families, enjoying the time when we are together. So just remember this: don’t let the keyboard separate you and your loved ones.
Please take action! That’s all. Thank you!

試題分析：這是一份發(fā)言稿，但是只給了一個關于網(wǎng)絡的話題，只有簡單的要點，沒有具體的內(nèi)容，屬于半開放性作文，給考生自由發(fā)揮的余地較大。對于考生的綜合能力要求較高，要求考生有很強的謀篇布局的能力和組織要點的能力。在完成開放性作文時，首先要選擇自己熟悉的短語或者句型，在你的能力范圍之內(nèi)，選擇句式時要賦予變化，因為這樣你才可以更好的駕馭。同時也要選擇合適的連接詞，把各個要點組織成一個完整的整體，如besides, further, last but not least等。
【亮點說明】所給范文語言簡潔，應用了一些較好的詞組和句子： pay enough attention to 注意，take action采取行動， There’s no doubt that we benefit much from the Internet. 這句話用了固定句型，it’s convenient for us to get the information we need and communicate with our friends and relatives. 這句話用了it做形式主語， it can help us learn what is happening both at home and abroad. 這句話用了賓語從句，However, no matter how attractive the Internet is, we shouldn’t be separated from our loved ones. 這句話用了讓步狀語從句，還有范文還使用了 Meanwhile, Therefore,這樣的詞使文章更加連貫。