Question

根據(jù)一份調(diào)查顯示, 現(xiàn)在各個高中學校中的高中生面臨沉重的學習壓力，因此，很多同學課間休息時間也坐在教室里學習，但效果并不理想。就此，英語周報舉辦一次征文活動，以勸誡這些同學：適當?shù)男菹⒑苡斜匾��，F(xiàn)請你以“The Break Between Classes”為題，按以下要求寫一篇英語短文，讓這些同學從中受到啟發(fā)。要點如下：
請簡要描述現(xiàn)象：很多同學在課間休息時間也坐在教室里學習，但效果并不理想；
十分鐘的課間休息很有必要；
你是如何利用這十分鐘休息時間的。
注意：詞數(shù)100詞左右，開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。
The Break Between Classes
Time seems to be so limited for us senior high school students.
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Answer 1

Onea possible version：
The Break Between Classes
Time seems to be so limited for us senior high school students. Thus, with so much work to do, a great many students are always eager to seize every minute to study in and after class, including the ten-minute break. However, the outcome isn’t as satisfying as expected.       
As far as I know, we need the short break, of which the significance can’t be overlooked. As a matter of fact, the ten-minute break helps us keep a balance between study and relaxation. Short as the break is, we can refresh ourselves and get well prepared for the next class. Thus, there is no need to push ourselves to study even during the short ten-minute break.
Now I’d like to share with you my ten-minute break activities. During the ten minutes, I will walk out of the classroom, breathe the fresh air, and then make the preparations for the next class. Only in this way can I do my work remarkably well.

試題分析：本文屬于提綱作文，要求以“The Break Between Classes”為題來寫篇文章勸誡同學們要充分利用課間時間讓大腦進行休息以獲得更高的學習效率。文章共給出三個要點，在謀篇布局方面，可以采用三段式結(jié)構(gòu)來分別對要點加以介紹，這樣可以使文章層次清晰。在介紹每個要點時要充分發(fā)揮想象力，利用恰當?shù)倪B接詞或者過渡句以便使文章內(nèi)容連貫，語言流暢。而且寫作時還要盡量使用多種句式結(jié)構(gòu)來豐富文章語言。此外，文章是介紹一種普遍存在的現(xiàn)象，所以可以使用一般現(xiàn)在時。文中可以使用的連接詞有：therefore 、as a result 、however、thus等�？赡苁褂玫木湫陀校篒t is necessary for sb too sth； Oly in this way can we have a good rest。
【亮點說明】本篇書面表達用三個段落分別闡述了三個要點，首先描述存在的現(xiàn)象，然后提出課間休息的必要性，最后介紹自己的做法并提出建議。作者的這種結(jié)構(gòu)安排使文章段落清晰，層次分明。在語言方面，作者使用了豐富的句式結(jié)構(gòu)，比如固定句型there is no need to push ourselves to study even during the short ten-minute break.，讓步狀語從句Short as the break is和倒裝句Only in this way can I do my work remarkably well等，還有As far as I know，with so much work to do，As a matter of fact等大量短語的使用也使文章亮點紛呈，充分顯示了作者深厚的語言功底。