Question

人們常說(shuō)“戰(zhàn)勝自己，超越自我”。請(qǐng)你以“I only compete with myself”為題寫(xiě)一篇短文。敘述你生活或?qū)W習(xí)中的一件事，說(shuō)明只有戰(zhàn)勝了自己，超越了自己才有意義，才是真正意義上的成功。
注意：（1）詞數(shù)：120左右;
（2）文章題目和開(kāi)頭已給，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù);
（3）文中不得提及所在學(xué)校名稱及本人姓名;
I only complete with myself
In the real world, everyone wants to be splendid. Some look for a man of straw(假想的對(duì)手) to catch up with, while others just compete with themselves. To me own, I certainly __________
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Answer 1

I only complete with myself
In the real world, everyone wants to be splendid. Some look for a man of straw(假想的對(duì)手) to catch up with, while others just compete with themselves. To me own, I certainly stand for the latter.
As a high school student, my dream is to enter a key university. In order to realize it, I once locked on the number one student in our grade as my target object. But the result turned out to be far from satisfactory. Under greater and greater pressure, I just couldn’t concentrate my mind on studies and often made stupid mistakes. I realized I had to make a change. From then on I stopped forcing myself but struggled to the end just to be the best of me. What I required myself to achieve was not to be better than anyone else but to defeat the old one. Since then, I have performed better and made progress day by day.
So it is really useless setting unrealistic goals for ourselves, since there is always someone who is either prettier or smarter than us. We might have kept chasing after others for a lifetime but finally found that we didn’t achieve anything. As the saying goes, “God only saves the man who saves himself.” The person we need to compete with is just ourselves. Life will be surprisingly wonderful as long as we try to be the best of us.

試題分析：考查半開(kāi)放性作文。半開(kāi)放性作文給出了一個(gè)話題，并有部分的文字提示。給考生自由發(fā)揮的余地較大。本文討論的話題是“戰(zhàn)勝自己，超越自我”，按照要求要夾敘夾議，通過(guò)自己的親身經(jīng)歷進(jìn)行闡述只有戰(zhàn)勝了自己，超越了自己才有意義，才是真正意義上的成功。，要求考生在保證內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)全部概括的基礎(chǔ)上可以充分發(fā)揮自己的想象，進(jìn)而用自己的語(yǔ)言來(lái)表達(dá)某種觀點(diǎn)或看法，增添了寫(xiě)作的靈活性，同時(shí)能較好地考查考生的想象能力和英語(yǔ)語(yǔ)言表達(dá)能力。同時(shí)也要選擇合適的連接詞，把各個(gè)要點(diǎn)組織成一個(gè)完整的整體，如besides, further, last but not least等。高考英語(yǔ)作文已經(jīng)不再僅僅考察學(xué)生的議論能力，它有些借鑒中文作文，要求學(xué)生夾敘夾議。在敘述中，如果只是平鋪直敘那顯然得不到高分。描寫(xiě)的關(guān)鍵在于捕捉事物的特征，而高考作文往往要求學(xué)生在短短幾句話中描寫(xiě)到位，這其實(shí)是不低的要求。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這篇范文用了一些常用的短語(yǔ)：如：far from satisfactory， struggle to the end，make progress，day by day，chase after，compete with 等，還有句式也多變，如：As a high school student, my dream is to enter a key university.這句話用了不定式做表語(yǔ)， In order to realize it, I once locked on the number one student in our grade as my target object. 這句話用不定式做目的狀語(yǔ)， What I required myself to achieve was not to be better than anyone else but to defeat the old one.這句話用了主語(yǔ)從句，    So it is really useless setting unrealistic goals for ourselves, since there is always someone who is either prettier or smarter than us. 這句話用it做形式主語(yǔ)和定語(yǔ)從句，We might have kept others for a lifetime but finally found that we didn’t achieve anything. As the saying goes, “God only saves the man who saves himself.” 這句話用了非限制性定語(yǔ)從句， Life will be surprisingly wonderful as long as we try to be the best of us.這句話用了as long as引導(dǎo)條件狀語(yǔ)從句。