Question

有這樣一則故事：在唐太宗貞觀年間，在一個(gè)磨坊里，有一匹馬和一頭驢成了好朋友，馬在外面拉貨，驢在磨坊里拉磨。有一天，唐僧要到天竺取經(jīng)，選中了這匹馬，于是這匹馬就隨唐僧一起西游天竺，馱回了真經(jīng)，回來后，這匹馬向惜日的好友――驢，講述了一路上的美麗風(fēng)景和奇文趣事，這頭驢好生羨慕。這匹馬說：事實(shí)上，我和你都在一刻不停地走著一樣遠(yuǎn)的路，所不同是，我和師傅確定了遠(yuǎn)大的目標(biāo)，并堅(jiān)定地走下去，而你只是在磨坊里被矇住了眼睛。
請(qǐng)根據(jù)上面的文字提示，結(jié)合學(xué)校開展的“My Dream”主題班會(huì)，寫一篇書面發(fā)言材料，詞數(shù)100以上。

Answer 1

My dream is to become a teacher,and it will be not an easy thing to do. why doI want to be a teacher? first, being a teacher has been one of my dreams since my childhood. when I was a small boy,I saw our village education condition was limited because our village was so poor. it was often dropping from the roof when we had lessons.therefore.when I studied in the primary school, my dream had turned to plant in my heart.at that time, I swealed I would change my life because this dream has been hiding in my inner heart.so I do my efforts to make my dream come true.Despite of a lot of difficulty and hardship, i believe my dream will be realized.

試題分析：考查開放性作文。這篇開放性作文給出了一個(gè)故事，有部分的文字提示。給考生自由發(fā)揮的余地較大。對(duì)于考生的綜合能力要求較高，要求考生有很強(qiáng)的謀篇布局的能力和組織要點(diǎn)的能力。在完成開放性作文時(shí)，首先要選擇自己熟悉的短語或者句型，在你的能力范圍之內(nèi)，選擇句式時(shí)要賦予變化，因?yàn)檫@樣你才可以更好的駕馭。同時(shí)也要選擇合適的連接詞，把各個(gè)要點(diǎn)組織成一個(gè)完整的整體。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】范文中使用了一些詞組：do my efforts to努力做…，come true.成為現(xiàn)實(shí)，turned to 變成，和一些語法知識(shí)：my dream is to become a teacher,and it will be not an easy thing to do.這句話用了不定式做表語和定語， being a teacher has been one of my dreams since my childhood. 這句話用了動(dòng)名詞做主語， despite of a lot of difficulty and hardship, I believe my dream will be realized.這句話用despite表示轉(zhuǎn)折，還有文章還使用了 first,這樣的關(guān)聯(lián)詞，使文章更加連貫。