Question

現(xiàn)在許多年輕人對友誼的認(rèn)識存在一些誤區(qū)。有些人認(rèn)為能與你經(jīng)常呆在一起的人便是朋友，有些人認(rèn)為能經(jīng)常一起吃吃喝喝的人是朋友，另一些人則認(rèn)為能幫你隱瞞錯誤、逃避責(zé)任的人是朋友。你怎么看待這些觀點(diǎn)？請根據(jù)以下提示，用英語寫一篇短文，談?wù)勀銓ε笥训目捶ā?br />朋友應(yīng)該：1.誠實可信； 2. 樂于助人； 3. 相互尊重； 4. 志趣相投； 5.具有愛心
注意：1. 詞數(shù)：150左右；
2. 可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
3. 開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。
Nowadays many young people have some misunderstanding about friendship.
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Answer 1

Nowadays many young people have some misunderstanding about friendship.
Some say they will make friends with those who can often stay with them. Some think if a person can eat out with them, he or she is a friend. Others argue that someone who can help them escape punishment when they make a mistake is a friend.
Personally, I don’t agree with the above opinions. What makes a really good friend then?
First, your friend must be honest. They must always tell you the truth, even when the truth might not be what you want to hear. Second , a friend should be helpful and always willing to lend a hand . Favors should be done with gladness. Next, true friends respect each other. A friend should treat you the way they want to be treated. Also, sharing some interests is pretty important when it comes to friendship. Last but not least, a friend should be kind and should love you for who you are.

試題分析：本文是一篇給材料作文。在寫作之前必修認(rèn)真審題。
1、注意文章的時態(tài)。談?wù)剬ε笥训目矗�是我們生活中的一個常見問題，所以要用一般現(xiàn)在時。
2、確定要點(diǎn)：①有些人認(rèn)為能與你經(jīng)常呆在一起的人便是朋友 ②有些人認(rèn)為能經(jīng)常一起吃吃喝喝的人是朋友 ③另一些人則認(rèn)為能幫你隱瞞錯誤、逃避責(zé)任的人是朋友 ④用一句話過渡到發(fā)表你對朋友的看法 ⑤朋友要誠實可信 ⑥朋友要樂于助人 ⑦朋友要相互尊重 ⑧朋友要志趣相投 ⑨朋友要具有愛心。
3、寫作時適當(dāng)添加細(xì)節(jié)，來滿足字?jǐn)?shù)要求。
4、注意句子的銜接，使用一些高級詞匯及短語，以提高作文的檔次。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】
1、寫作中注意了表達(dá)的多樣性，如第一段中：Some say…, Some think…, Others argue that,用了三個不同的詞來表達(dá)“認(rèn)為”這個意思。
2、段與段之間過渡自然。第三段，發(fā)表自己看法時，以personally導(dǎo)入，讀起來流暢。
3、恰當(dāng)使用從句，提高了文章的檔次。第一段中兩個定語從句：who can often stay with them, who can help them escape punishment; 一個狀語從句：when they make a mistake。第四段中：一個表語從句：what you want to hear；一個高級的定語從句：the way they want to be treated；一個狀語從句：when it comes to friendship。一個介詞后的賓語從句：who you are。