Question

假設(shè)你是李華，你的父母總是喜歡替你包辦一切，你覺得很苦惱。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下提示給某英語報(bào)社編輯寫一封信。
1. 簡述現(xiàn)象（兩種）；
2. 分析弊端（兩個(gè)方面）；
3. 你的觀點(diǎn)或建議。
注意：
1. 詞數(shù)120左右；
2. 可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
3. 開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。
參考詞匯：獨(dú)立性independence
Dear Editor,
I’d like to tell you some of my problems with my parents in daily life. My parents tend to make almost all decisions for me. __________________________________________________
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Yours sincerely,
Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Editor,
I’d like to tell you some of my problems with my parents in daily life. My parents tend to make almost all decisions for me. They choose the school and subjects for me. Sometimes even clothing and daily timetables have to be decided by them.
In my opinion, deciding everything for children does not help them but harm them in many ways. Firstly, it will make children lack independence, which is unfavorable to their development in the long run. Secondly, in many cases parents’ decisions go against children’s personal ideas and interests, which will make children form resistance and naturally influence their growth.
I do believe to grow to be independent is a natural way for everybody. Parents should give us chances to make our own decisions. They may help us make choices instead of replacing us to make choices.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua

試題分析：本文是一篇提綱類作文，但是只是大概的提綱沒有具體的要點(diǎn)，對(duì)考生的要求非常高，需要考生有較強(qiáng)的組織語言的能力和運(yùn)用語言的功底。本文的話題是父母總是喜歡包辦一切，考生所熟悉的，具有可寫性。在寫作之前，注意謀篇布局，文章應(yīng)該是三段，第一段提及這種現(xiàn)象，第二段談弊端，第三段分析原因提出建議。在寫作時(shí)要注意選詞如independently，Gradually，accompany等高級(jí)詞匯的運(yùn)用。同時(shí)運(yùn)用合適的連接詞和句型。最后要注意對(duì)文章的潤色。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】My parents tend to make almost all decisions for me.這里有固定短語：tend to do
In my opinion, deciding everything for children does not help them but harm them in many ways.這句話用了動(dòng)名詞做主語， it will make children lack independence, which is unfavorable to their development in the long run.這句話用了非限制性定語從句， in many cases parents’ decisions go against children’s personal ideas and interests, which will make children form resistance and naturally influence their growth.這句話也是非限制性定語從句， I do believe to grow to be independent is a natural way for everybody.這句話用了強(qiáng)調(diào)，還有范文還使用了 Firstly, Secondly,這樣的關(guān)聯(lián)詞，使文章更加連貫。