Question

假設你是本刊讀者Jack，請你根據所給的背景材料給Peter寫封回信。內容包括：
1．分析Peter父母不同意的理由；
2．你給Peter的具體建議: 1) 和父母好好談談,讓他們意識到參加街舞培訓班的好處。2）請培訓班老師幫忙。3）向父母承諾不花費太多時間影響學習。
背景材料：
Teenagers 總228（10/2009）期
編者按：本期刊登了Peter的來信，歡迎讀者就信中談到的問題進行分析并提出建議。
Editor,
I’m a boy of 18. I like arts, especially dancing. I want to attend a hip-hop (街舞) training course on the weekend, but my parents don’t permit me to. I’m very upset and need your advice.
Peter
注意：1、詞數100左右；2、文章的開頭已經給出，不計入總詞數。
Dear peter,
You are very upset that your parents don’t permit you to attend a hip-hop training course on the weekend.                                                           
                                                                         
Yours,
Jack

Answer 1

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Dear Peter,
You are very upset that your parents don’t permit you to attend a hip-hop training course on the weekend. I understand your situation. Maybe your parents are worried that you will spend so much time on it that your study will be affected.
I suggest you have a good talk with your parents. You can also turn to your dance teacher for help. You should make you parents aware of the benefits of the training class. For example, the training will build up your body and make your mind relaxed. What’s more, you can communicate with more people and learn a lot about society. Of course, you must promise that you will not spend too much time on it.
I’m sure your parents will agree with you in the end.
Yours,
Jack

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