Question

假如你叫王倩，5月26日那天，你和同學約好去春游。請你根據表格中所給信息，用英語寫一篇日記。

活動時間	5月26日（星期日）
集合地點	學校大門口
出發(fā)時間	8:00am	到達時間	8:30am
活動地點	人民公園(the People’s Park)
交通工具	自行車
活動內容	上午 做游戲
	中午  野餐
	下午 拍照片；參觀動物園
返回時間	5:00pm

參考詞匯：出發(fā)set off
May 26^th, Sunday                                       Fine
It was fine.________________________________________________

Answer 1

May 26^th, Sunday                                                       Fine
It was fine. I had a spring outing with my classmates today. We met at the school gate in the morning. And we set off at 8 O’clock. We went there by bike and we arrived at the People’s Park at half past 8. There were lots of people. In the morning, I played games with my classmates. Then we had a picnic together. In the afternoon, we took some photos and visited the zoo. We saw many cute animals there. We returned home at 5 in the afternoon. We were very happy.

試題分析：這篇作為要求我們以王倩的身份寫一篇日記，在日記中記錄5月26號這天，和同學們一起去人民公園春游的事情。在題目中給出了我們這篇作文應主要包含的要點，如見面的時間和地點，出發(fā)和到達的時間，在公園里的活動等。另外在寫的時候，我們可以再補充一些公園里的場景和自己的感受等相關的內容。因為這是一篇日記，所以這篇短文應主要使用一般過去時態(tài)，要注意句子中動詞形式的變化。寫作時，要按照時間的順序記錄這一天的行程，注意表達流暢，語言準確。
【亮點說明】這是一篇比較優(yōu)秀的范文。在這篇短文中作者記錄了自己和同學們在人民公園春游的情景。作者寫作時是按照時間順序來安排的，從早上在校門口集合出發(fā)，到在公園里做的事情等，非常有條理，有秩序。本文時態(tài)、人稱正確，表述流暢，加上了一些自己感受的句子，使文章更豐富。文章中較好的句式有We went there by bike and we arrived at the People’s Park at half past 8、There were lots of people、Then we had a picnic together、We were very happy等。