Question

假如明天是你媽媽的生日，你想為媽媽做一份炒飯，請(qǐng)根據(jù)所給內(nèi)容提示，寫一篇你做炒飯的過(guò)程。1. 2. 3.
參考詞匯：1. fried rice  cooked meat   oil   salt   green onions(蔥)
2. cook   cut   put    fry    add
3. carefully  finely(細(xì)微地)  slowly  lightly
要   求：1.語(yǔ)言表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確，語(yǔ)意通順、連貫；
2.書寫工整、規(guī)范；
3.根據(jù)所給內(nèi)容及參考詞匯，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；
4.文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的校名和姓名；
3. 詞數(shù)：70詞左右。文章的開頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。
Tomorrow is my mother’s birthday.

Answer 1

One possible version 1：
Tomorrow is my mother’s birthday. I want to make fried rice for her in order to express my love. I am sure I can cook it very well. Now let me show you how to cook it. First, cut some cooked meat very finely. Next, I need to put some oil in the pan. Then fry the meat lightly. After that, I need to add the rice slowly. Fry it for a few minutes. Finally, add some salt and green onions. Now the fried rice is ready.(82words)
One possible version 2：
Tomorrow is my mother’s birthday, I want to do something for my mother, I ’d like to make fried rice for her. First, I must cut some cooked meat very finely. Next, I need to put some oil in the pan, fry the meat lightly. After that, I need to add the rice slowly. Then fry it for a few minutes. Finally, I should add some salt and green onion. How delicious! My fried rice is ready, I hope my mother will enjoy it.

試題分析：這是一篇給材料作文，寫做炒飯的過(guò)程。結(jié)合所給材料，可知本文主要用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，人稱為單數(shù)第一，人稱，句子結(jié)構(gòu)主要為祈使句和帶有情態(tài)動(dòng)詞的句子。注意做法步驟的先后順序。比如：first，second，third等句式的應(yīng)用。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文內(nèi)容涵蓋所有要點(diǎn)，格式正確，語(yǔ)言流暢，表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確，意思連貫；先簡(jiǎn)要說(shuō)明寫作目的。同時(shí)運(yùn)用first，second，then, finally表順序的詞使文章先后順序清楚、意思連貫。恰當(dāng)?shù)剡\(yùn)用了參考詞匯表達(dá)不同步驟的不同做法。第一篇以祈使句為主；第二篇祈使句加帶有must、need to等情態(tài)動(dòng)詞的句子是主要特點(diǎn)。