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閱讀下面一則新聞和一副圖片
家人朋友同事聚會吃飯，以前其樂融融一起天南海北地扯，現(xiàn)在隨著智能手機的流行，出現(xiàn)了一種“怪現(xiàn)象”：一桌子人一起吃飯，大家少有交談，都圍著餐桌玩起了手機。這樣的現(xiàn)象你身邊有嗎？
《廣州日報》就“飯局聚會大家都在玩手機，你怎么看?”進行了讀者調(diào)查，調(diào)查結(jié)果顯示，很多讀者表示對此現(xiàn)象無法忍受，他們認為“飯局是大家面對面的社交場合，每個人都玩手機，和對著虛擬世界沒什么兩樣”;而認為能夠忍受的人則覺得，玩手機確實能緩解壓力和與人交往帶來的不適。

請根據(jù)此新聞和圖片寫一篇不少于120詞的文章，內(nèi)容包括：
簡要描述圖片和新聞中的社會現(xiàn)象；2. 分析產(chǎn)生此現(xiàn)象的原因 3談談你的看法和建議
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Nowadays, with the increasing popularity of smart phones (智能手機), …

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Nowadays, with the increasing popularity of smart phones (智能手機), it is not unusual to find a group of people sitting around the table, each playing with their smart phones separately instead of talking with each other face to face. As is vividly shown in the picture, the old lady is serving the table disappointedly, with all the other family members absorbed in their electronic products.
There are several reasons accounting for this phenomenon. Some people may lack the ability to communicate with others or the common interest while others claim that it’s a good way to relieve stress and embarrassment in social communications. Naturally, there are still others who are heavy smart phone users and fail to break away from the addiction.
As far as I’m concerned, it is essential for us to build closer social bonds through face-to-face conversations when getting together with our relatives, friends, classmates and colleagues. I strongly recommend that you put away your smart phones in such occasions not only to show respect for others but also to enjoy the gatherings and improve your communicative skills as well.

試題分析：這是一篇看圖作文，反映了因為智能手機的流行，人們忽視了現(xiàn)實社會的人與人交流的問題，寫作時要認真讀圖，不要僅僅對圖畫進行描述，也要添加些內(nèi)容，使文章看起來更充實，要組成一篇通順連貫的短文。需要注意緊扣文章主題，給出的要點都需要包括，缺一不可。寫作時注意準確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，一定要契合給出的開頭，不能出現(xiàn)文章脫節(jié)問題。盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次。
【亮點說明】這篇范文最大的特點是使用了詞組和多變的句式，適當使用了高中的語法知識：account for“解釋，是…的原因”， As far as I’m concerned,“據(jù)我所知”， it is not unusual to find a group of people sitting around the table, each playing with their smart phones separately instead of talking with each other face to face. 這句話用了現(xiàn)在分詞和獨立主格結(jié)構(gòu)，As is vividly shown in the picture, the old lady is serving the table disappointedly, with all the other family members absorbed in their electronic products.這句話用了非限制性定語從句和with符合結(jié)構(gòu)， Some people may lack the ability to communicate with others or the common interest while others claim that it’s a good way to relieve stress and embarrassment in social communications. 這句話用了while表示對比，和it做形式主語，Naturally, there are still others who are heavy smart phone users and fail to break away from the addiction.這句話用了定語從句， it is essential for us to build closer social bonds through face-to-face conversations when getting together with our relatives, friends, classmates and colleagues. 這句話用了狀語從句的省略句，I strongly recommend that you put away your smart phones in such occasions not only to show respect for others but also to enjoy the gatherings and improve your communicative skills as well.這句話用了not only…but also結(jié)構(gòu)。