Question

假設(shè)你是中學(xué)生劉麗，你的媽媽對(duì)你的學(xué)習(xí)成績(jī)要求很苛刻：每次考試必須進(jìn)入班內(nèi)前三名；你為此感到很有壓力。請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下提示用英語(yǔ)給媽媽寫(xiě)一篇書(shū)信：
表明自己的想法；
陳述自己的理由；
表達(dá)自己的愿望。
注意：1. 詞數(shù)：120-150；
2. 可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)， 以使內(nèi)容充實(shí)、行文連貫；
3. 信的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。
Dear Mum,
I feel it really necessary to have a talk with you and I do hope this letter can help us better understand each other. ____________________________________________________________
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Yours sincerely,
Liu Li

Answer 1

Dear Mum,
I feel it really necessary to have a talk with you and I do hope this letter can help us better understand each other.
Mum, I understand your true love for me, but I have to say your opinion about my study is not quite right.
Firstly, I think high grades are important, but a student can’t be judged only by this standard. A student should develop in every respect, including wisdom, health and life attitude. In addition, hard work is not always a guarantee of top places in class. Good marks depend on many factors, such as diligence, intelligence and good luck. Last but not least, you have put so much pressure on me that every time I take an exam, I always feel nervous and anxious…
So, dear Mum, please don’t be so strict with me in my study any longer. Please let me live like a lovely girl; let me make more friends; and most importantly, let me grow up normally, healthily and happily.
I love you, Mum!
Yours sincerely,
Liu Li

試題分析：考查應(yīng)用文中的書(shū)信的寫(xiě)作。你的媽媽對(duì)你的學(xué)習(xí)成績(jī)要求很苛刻：每次考試必須進(jìn)入班內(nèi)前三名；你為此感到很有壓力。請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下提示用英語(yǔ)給媽媽寫(xiě)一篇書(shū)信。要點(diǎn)都已經(jīng)給出，信件要點(diǎn)包括：表明自己的想法；陳述自己的理由；表達(dá)自己的愿望。審題時(shí)注意本文使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，描述要盡量選擇簡(jiǎn)潔的語(yǔ)言，運(yùn)用合適的語(yǔ)法規(guī)則和詞匯把各要點(diǎn)都準(zhǔn)確表述出。難點(diǎn)在于選擇詞匯和句型，可以靈活運(yùn)用高級(jí)詞匯和固定短語(yǔ)準(zhǔn)確表述。象范文的you have put so much pressure on me that every time I take an exam,使用了every time這樣的連詞結(jié)構(gòu)，還要用適當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞被句子連接起來(lái)，象In addition, Last but not least等詞，這樣文章顯得更連貫。
點(diǎn)評(píng)：書(shū)信類(lèi)短文的關(guān)鍵在于要點(diǎn)要全面包括，不能有遺漏和省略。同時(shí)注意謀篇布局的順序，運(yùn)用合適的連接詞連接全文，同時(shí)選擇高級(jí)的詞匯和語(yǔ)法項(xiàng)目讓文章更有文采。